Question

【題目】【2016江蘇宿遷】書面表達(dá)

為增強(qiáng)安全意識(shí)，學(xué)校英語(yǔ)俱樂部將開展“如何提升自我保護(hù)能力”的討論。請(qǐng)以“How to protect ourselves”為題，寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文，內(nèi)容必須包括以下要點(diǎn)：

1. 尊敬師長(zhǎng)，與同學(xué)好相處；

2. 公共場(chǎng)所，舉止文明，不追逐打鬧；

3. 不亂交網(wǎng)友，不泄露個(gè)人信息；

4. ……（自助發(fā)揮，至少兩點(diǎn)）

注意事項(xiàng)：

1.詞數(shù)90左右，標(biāo)題與結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

2.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的地名、校名、人名等信息。

How to protect ourselves

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Danger is never as far away as we think. Take good care of ourselves at all times!

Answer 1

【答案】

How to protect ourselves

Protecting ourselves is becoming more and more important. To ensure our safety, we need to know how to protect ourselves.

First of all, we must respect our teachers and parents. We should get on well with our classmates as well. We also need to behave well in public and don't make any noise. What's more, in our daily life, it's very important for us to keep our own information safe. We must choose right e-friends when we chat on the Internet. Last but not least, when we get out, we must obey the traffic rules. And we must improve the awareness of protecting ourselves.

Danger is never as far away as we think. Take good care of ourselves at all times!

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料的提綱作文，本文只給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)。根據(jù)提示，寫作中要注意從“與人相處、公共場(chǎng)所的舉止、交網(wǎng)友”等方面進(jìn)行闡述，并自己補(bǔ)充一到兩點(diǎn)。動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容組織語(yǔ)言，列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，關(guān)鍵單詞等。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，做到語(yǔ)句通順。寫作中注意使用連接詞，序數(shù)詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。短文用第一人稱，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本范文第一段先提出觀點(diǎn)：保護(hù)我們自己變得越來(lái)越重要，然后用一個(gè)句子過(guò)渡：我們需要知道怎樣保護(hù)自己，引出下文。語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)捷。所用的動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)及不定式作目的狀語(yǔ)，準(zhǔn)確恰當(dāng)。第二段詳細(xì)闡述如何保護(hù)自己，本段用first of all, what’s more, last but not least等等引出各要點(diǎn)，層次清楚，條理分明。We must, we should, we also need等等不同句式的使用，使本文生動(dòng)具體；不定式作主語(yǔ)，帶有時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的復(fù)合句等等的使用，也為本文增色添彩。最后一段點(diǎn)明中心，突出主題：危險(xiǎn)離我們絕不遙遠(yuǎn)，一直要照顧好我們自己。