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4．作文一：常言說(shuō)：夢(mèng)想不是現(xiàn)成的糧食，而是一粒需要我去播種的種子；夢(mèng)想不是繪就的畫卷，而是一張白紙，需要我去描畫；夢(mèng)想不是蔥籠的綠洲，而是一片荒漠，需要我去開(kāi)墾．  你的夢(mèng)想是什么？你將如何為這個(gè)夢(mèng)想去奮斗以爭(zhēng)取實(shí)現(xiàn)？請(qǐng)你My dream為題，寫篇70字左右短文．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice．也許成為導(dǎo)游是最好的選擇．
本句是動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)being a tour guide 作為主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)用is．還用最高級(jí)best來(lái)總結(jié)上文給出的原因說(shuō)這是最好的選擇
【高分句型二】
If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country．如果我成為一名導(dǎo)游，我能全中國(guó)旅游，更了解我們國(guó)家．
本句是運(yùn)用了if引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，主句含有情態(tài)動(dòng)詞，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)代替一般將來(lái)

解答 My Dream
     Everyone has his dream．My dream is to be a tour guide．（夢(mèng)想是什么．）
    Why do I want to be a tour guide？First of all，I‘m an outgoing girl，and I like doing some exciting things．Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice【高分句型一】If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country【高分句型二】Then I will tell the foreign tourists about our colorful history．Second，I like making friends．If I work as a tour guide，I can make a lot of friends all over the world．This may be great．Perhaps someday my foreign friends will ask me to visit their countries．I really like to go to their countries to know something about their culture．What's more，I like singing．Singing English songs is my favorite．I believe I will be popular with foreign tourists．Their trip will be excellent．（理由）
    Now，I am still a middle school student．My job now is to work hard in school．Then I'll go to university to learn something about being a tour guide．I'm sure I can be a qualified tour guide in the future．（怎樣實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想）
    There is an old saying："No pain，no gain．"I'll try my best to make my dream come true!

點(diǎn)評(píng) 寫作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用．寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要表達(dá)自己夢(mèng)想會(huì)實(shí)現(xiàn)的愿望．