Question

7．在你取得進(jìn)步和成功的三年路程里，你的父母、老師、同學(xué)肯定曾給予你很大的幫助．畢業(yè)在即，你最想感謝的人是誰(shuí)？請(qǐng)你參考下圖，寫一篇題為"The person I want to Thank Most!"的短文，放入自己的畢業(yè)紀(jì)念冊(cè)．
要求：
（1）句中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和校名； （2）詞數(shù)為80-100；（3）開頭以給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．

The Person I Want to Thank Most
In my junior school life，a lot of people have helped me．I thank them very much．But the person I want to thank most ismy English teacher--Ms Lee．
My English teacher Ms Lee is very kind and easygoing．She helps me alot．She takes good care of us．She often helps me with my English．When I am in trouble，she always encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice．I still remember that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset she cheered me up and told me some good ways to improve my English．With her help，I made great progress in English and became increasingly interested in it．
I'm very thankful for all that she has done for me．I'll try my best to live up to her expectations．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是以"The person I want to Thank Most!"為題說(shuō)說(shuō)你最想感謝的人．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．最想感謝的人是誰(shuí)；
2．性格；
3．怎樣幫助你的？
4．感受和打算．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
take care of 照顧
help sb with sth 幫助某人做某事
in trouble 處于困境
encourage sb to do sth 鼓勵(lì)某人做某事
cheer up 使振奮
with one's help 在某人的幫助下
make progress 取得進(jìn)步
be interested in 對(duì)…感興趣
try one's best to do sth 盡力做某事
【高分句型】
1．①When I am in trouble，she always ②encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice．
①when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，in trouble 處于困境
②encourage sb to do sth 鼓勵(lì)某人做某事

2．I still remember①that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset she ②cheered me up and told me some good ways ③to improve my English．
①that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為remember的賓語(yǔ)．
②cheer up 使振奮
③動(dòng)詞不定式作為目的狀語(yǔ)．
3．I'm very thankful for all that she has done for me
that作為關(guān)系詞的定語(yǔ)從句，that作為從句的賓語(yǔ)．修飾先行詞all．

解答 The Person I Want to Thank Most
In my junior school life，a lot of people have helped me．I thank them very much．But the person I want to thank most is my English teacher--Ms Lee．（最想感謝的人是誰(shuí)）
   My English teacher Ms Lee is very kind and easygoing．（性格）She helps me a lot．She takes good care of us．She often helps me with my English．When I am in trouble，she always encourages me to face my difficulties and gives me good advice．【高分句型】I still remember that once I failed in an important English exam and was upset she cheered me up and told me some good ways to improve my English．【高分句型】With her help，I made great progress in English and became increasingly interested in it．（怎樣幫助你的，舉例說(shuō)明）
   I'm very thankful for all that she has done for me．【高分句型】I'll try my best to live up to her expectations．（感受和打算）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本題是一篇圖表作文，寫自己最想感謝的人，學(xué)生比較有話說(shuō)，但是要注意提示要點(diǎn)一定寫全．同時(shí)還要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語(yǔ)法規(guī)則的正確性．寫作時(shí)，要注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式的變化．另外，還需要使用一些句型和短語(yǔ)，使整篇短文意思連貫，表達(dá)流暢．