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中國，多么美麗的一個(gè)名字。
我們以在這個(gè)偉大的國家生活而自豪。我們的人們生活快樂，我們用我們勤勞的雙手建設(shè)我們的國家。在改革開放后我們國家變得越來越富有，2008年的奧運(yùn)會(huì)成功主辦，更標(biāo)志著我們國家已經(jīng)進(jìn)入一個(gè)國際經(jīng)濟(jì)強(qiáng)國。
我們不會(huì)忘記，當(dāng)雪災(zāi)、地震來臨時(shí)，我們的戰(zhàn)士，我們的人們，團(tuán)結(jié)一心、奮勇抵抗的場景。
我們也不會(huì)忘記，我們美好的祖國河山，多彩的名勝古跡，我們的祖先偉大的四大發(fā)明，我們是炎黃子孫。
中國，我為你自豪。
參考詞匯：proud, economic(經(jīng)濟(jì)), unit(團(tuán)結(jié)), disaster, rich, powerful
China, I’m proud of you!
I love my country, because we can live a happy life in China, all the people are fair there, all the people make their life by their hands, there isn’t any press or darkness ...

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I love my country,because we can live a happy life in China ,all the people are fair there, all the people make their life by their hands ,there isn’t any press or darkness .Because of the opening-up policy. China becomes more healthy and richer, we can see Hong Kong return to its motherland on July 1st 1997, we can see China have been entered into WTO in 2001, China enter to a new stage. The 29th Olympic Games in 2008 was hold in the capital Beijing .China was developing into an economic intemational country。
China, what a pretty name it is!
I love my country. Chinese people were all united. We can see the soldiers removing the snow without having the New Years’ Day in the snow disaster, we can see the people from all over the country raising money to Yu Shu and Wen Chuan people . From Wenchuan to Yushu, now we have reason to believe why the Yushu could out of trouble after the earthquake. I believe our country will become more and more powerful.
China, I am proud of you! I always belong to my country ,I am proud of China . China has a plenty of places of interest with a long history, we also have a rich of cultural history, we can see the Great Wall, we can see the Qin Shi Huang Tomb has thousands of warriors and horses in this magnificent tomb .We always regard ourselves as the yanhuangzisun and we also created the paper- making, printing, compass, gun-powder .How great our country is!

試題分析: 這是一篇提綱類作文。給出的材料比較全面，我們所要做的首先是應(yīng)用正確的英語句子把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來，在此基礎(chǔ)上亦可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，注意不要遺漏材料中給出的要點(diǎn)。寫作前先結(jié)合要表達(dá)的事情確定句子的人稱時(shí)態(tài)，注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號及大小寫等問題，不要犯語法錯(cuò)誤。注意上下文之間的邏輯關(guān)系，語意連貫。
點(diǎn)評：注意寫作中的時(shí)態(tài)、人稱和數(shù)的問題，時(shí)態(tài)一般是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱是第一人稱較多。寫作中語言要準(zhǔn)確、簡明，說明有條理，符合邏輯。