Question

根據(jù)下表所列內(nèi)容，寫一篇文章介紹你的筆友張平，并根據(jù)他的困惑給他提一些建議。要點(diǎn)表達(dá)要全，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。字?jǐn)?shù)100字左右。

	出生日期	1997年8月23日
基本	星座	Virgo
情況	個(gè)性	謙虛，實(shí)事求是，注重細(xì)節(jié)。
愛(ài)好	酷愛(ài)足球，熱愛(ài)大自然，加入Birdwatching Club兩年了
	學(xué)習(xí)	作業(yè)多，想考高分，壓力大。
困惑	情感	父母整天忙于工作，不時(shí)感到孤獨(dú)。
	穿白色衣服，因?yàn)椤��?/p>
建議	使用黃色文具復(fù)習(xí)迎考，因?yàn)椤��?/p>
多與家人朋友……

Zhang Ping is my pen friend. He_______________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

.  Zhang Ping is my pen friend. He was born on August 23, 1997. He is a Virgo. Zhang Ping is a modest person. He’s practical and pays attention to details. He has many hobbies. He is crazy about playing football. He also loves nature. He has been in the Birdwatching Club for 2 years. However, as a Grade 9 student, he has some problems. He has too much homework to do. He feels stressed because he wants to get high marks in exams. What’s more, his parents are busy working all day and have no time for him, so he feels lonely from time to time.

    I want to offer Zhang Ping some advice. When he feels stressed , he should wear white, because white can make him feel calm and peaceful. When he study for exams, he can use yellow stationery, because yellow is the colour of wisdom. When he feels lonely, he can have communication with his family or friends and share his worries with them. I hope my advice will be of great value to him.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是人物簡(jiǎn)介，給出一定的漢語(yǔ)提示。給考生發(fā)揮的余地 較大。對(duì)于考生的綜合能力較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語(yǔ)或者句型，在自己能力范圍內(nèi)，選擇句式要賦予變化，這樣才能證明你能更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)整體。最后要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯與高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。因?yàn)槭侨宋锝榻B，故時(shí)態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)較好，注意人稱的轉(zhuǎn)換

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文出現(xiàn)一些比較覺(jué)的短語(yǔ)，如pay attention to 注意，be crazy about 對(duì)，，瘋狂著迷。Be busy doing 忙于做某事。Share sth with sb 與某人分享某事。He has too much homework to do 他有很多功課要做，考查 have sth to do 有事要做。He feels stressed because he wants to get high marks in exams， 因?yàn)橄肴〉煤玫姆謹(jǐn)?shù)故感覺(jué)很有壓力，feel stress 感到壓力。I hope my advice will be of great value to him.， 我希望我的建議對(duì)你有所幫助，提到 be of +抽象名詞等于be + adj 。本文還出現(xiàn)一些高級(jí)詞匯如stressed marks  advice communication  value， 為文章增色不少。 文中還出現(xiàn)一些連詞如because ,what’s more, however 使文章流暢，邏輯分明。

考點(diǎn)： 提綱類作文。