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11．隨著手機(jī)功能日益增多，越來(lái)越多的年輕人沉迷于手機(jī)娛樂(lè)活動(dòng)，成為"手機(jī)控"一族．假定你是某校學(xué)生，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示寫(xiě)一篇短文，向某英文報(bào)社投稿，談?wù)勀銓?duì)該現(xiàn)象的看法和建議．

"手機(jī)控"的表現(xiàn)	沉迷于手機(jī)娛樂(lè)活動(dòng)（聊天、看電影等），與朋友和家人的交流減少，離開(kāi)手機(jī)會(huì)有焦慮癥等異常情緒表現(xiàn)…
"手機(jī)控"的危害	對(duì)健康不利，影響學(xué)習(xí)…
你的建議	…

參考詞匯：手機(jī)控a phone freak焦慮anxious（adj．）沉迷于be addicted to …
注意：1．內(nèi)容須包括所提示信息，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．文中不得出現(xiàn)自己的真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
3.90個(gè)單詞左右．開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總次數(shù)．
Today，many people，especially young people，are phone freaks．They …
                                                     

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是向某英文報(bào)社投稿，談?wù)勀銓?duì)"手機(jī)控"的看法和建議．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1"手機(jī)控"的表現(xiàn)：沉迷于手機(jī)娛樂(lè)活動(dòng)（聊天、看電影等），與朋友和家人的交流減少，離開(kāi)手機(jī)會(huì)有焦慮癥等異常情緒表現(xiàn)…
2"手機(jī)控"的危害：對(duì)健康不利，影響學(xué)習(xí)…
3 你的建議
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
spend+時(shí)間+doing sth 花時(shí)間做某事
communicate with sb 與某人交流
be good for 對(duì)…有益
do harm to 對(duì)…不利
focus on專注于
pay attention to 關(guān)注

【高分句型】
1．①Besides，②focusing on mobile phone entertainment can affect students'study．
①besides 另外
②動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)．focus on專注于．
2．①I(mǎi)f they fill their time this way，they won't have too much spare time ②to think about phone entertainment
①if 引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，遵循主將從現(xiàn)的規(guī)則．
②動(dòng)詞不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)．

解答 Today many people，especially young people，are phone freaks．They spend a lot of time playing games，seeing movies，or reading novels on their smart phone，and thus communicate with their family and friends less．Without phone in hand，they will feel anxious and don't know what to do．（"手機(jī)控"的表現(xiàn)）As we know，too long screen time is not good for health．It does great harm to our neck and eyes．Besides，focusing on mobile phone entertainment can affect students'study【高分句型】．（"手機(jī)控"的危害）I think young people should spend more time doing sports or being with their family and friends．They should also pay more attention to their studies．If they fill their time this way，they won't have too much spare time to think about phone entertainment．【高分句型】（我的建議）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本題是一篇圖表作文，圖表作為書(shū)面表達(dá)的一種信息提示方式，比提綱作文線索顯得更簡(jiǎn)潔明了，寫(xiě)作時(shí)也容易區(qū)分表達(dá)，本題在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，要特別注意幾種情況的描述，不能逐句翻譯，同時(shí)要根據(jù)提示有效靈活的構(gòu)思，恰當(dāng)使用邏輯詞語(yǔ)，讓文章顯得有條理，不雜亂