Question

假如你是一名九年級(jí)學(xué)生李斌，最近你覺得學(xué)習(xí)壓力大，與父母關(guān)系不融洽，孩提時(shí)代的快樂不復(fù)存在。對(duì)此，你很苦惱。你要寫一封信給青少年專家Sigmund Friend，告訴他你遇到的問題，并請求幫助。請根據(jù)下列表格中所列的信息，寫完這封信。

In the past	now
go shopping with parents	have too much homework to do
play with friends outside	get bad grades in exams
read interesting books	argue with parents
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注意： ⑴文章必須包括表中所給的信息，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，注意行文流暢；
⑵文章開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
⑶詞數(shù)80個(gè)字左右。
Dear Sigmund Friend,
My name is Li Bin. I’m a Grade 9 student in No. 2 Middle School. I’m unhappy these days.________________________________________________________________________________________
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Can you give me some useful advice? I hope to hear from you soon.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Bin

Answer 1

Dear Sigmund Friend,
My name is Li Bin. I’m a Grade 9 student in No. 2 Middle School. I’m unhappy these days. I have too much homework to do. What’s more, I always get bad grades in exams, though I work really hard. I think I’m under great pressure. Thirdly, my parents don’t allow me to play outside and I often argue with them. I’m not allowed to play computer games at home, either. I feel sad. Things are different in the past. I used to go shopping with parents on weekends. And I could play with my friends in the open air. We enjoyed ourselves. Every night, I read interesting books. I love reading. What’s more, I used to visit somewhere quiet and beautiful on holidays with my family. I miss those happy moments.
Can you give me some useful advice? I hope to hear from you soon.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Bin

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫作中注意將自己的煩惱介紹清澈。根據(jù)材料可知，本文涉及過去和現(xiàn)在兩種時(shí)態(tài)的運(yùn)用，寫作中主語時(shí)態(tài)及主謂一致等問題。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，做到語句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文在寫作中使用了很多固定句式，如：too……to太……而不能；used to過去常常做某事；enjoyonself，玩得很高興；what’s more而且，等句式。作者并且在寫作中巧妙的使用了連詞，序數(shù)詞，使得本文看起來邏輯清楚，條理分明。所以在學(xué)習(xí)中，我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.