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3．隨著手機(jī)功能日益增多，越來(lái)越多的年輕人沉迷于手機(jī)娛樂(lè)活動(dòng)，成為"手機(jī)控"一族．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)兩幅漫畫和以下提示寫一篇短文．

"手機(jī)控"的表現(xiàn)	沉迷于手機(jī)娛樂(lè)活動(dòng)（聊天看電影等），與朋友和家人的交流減少，離開(kāi)手機(jī)會(huì)有焦慮等異常情緒表現(xiàn)…
"手機(jī)控"的危害	對(duì)健康不利，影響學(xué)習(xí)，走路時(shí)看手機(jī)尤其危險(xiǎn)…
你的建議	…

參考詞匯：
手機(jī)控：a phine freak 焦慮的：anxious  沉迷于：be addicted to…微信：wechat
低頭族：phubbing
注意：1．內(nèi)容包括所給提示信息，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．文中不得出現(xiàn)自己的真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
3.90個(gè)單詞左右，開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Today many people，especially young people，have become phone freaks．They                ．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
①Besides，②focusing on mobile phone entertainment can affect students'study．另外，沉迷于手機(jī)娛樂(lè)會(huì)影響學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)．
①besides 另外
②動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)做主語(yǔ)．focus on專注于．
【高分句型二】
①If they fill their time this way，they won't have too much spare time ②to think about phone entertainment如果他們這樣讓自己的時(shí)間充滿，就不會(huì)有更多的空閑時(shí)間去想手機(jī)娛樂(lè)．
①if 引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，遵循主將從現(xiàn)的規(guī)則．
②動(dòng)詞不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)．

解答 Today many people，especially young people，are phone freaks．They spend a lot of time playing games，seeing movies，or reading novels on their smart phone，and thus communicate with their family and friends less．Without phone in hand，they will feel anxious and don't know what to do．（"手機(jī)控"的表現(xiàn)）As we know，too long screen time is not good for health．It does great harm to our neck and eyes．Besides，focusing on mobile phone entertainment can affect students'study【高分句型一】．It can also be dangerous if you do it when crossing a street（"手機(jī)控"的危害）I think young people should spend more time doing sports or being with their family and friends．They should also pay more attention to their studies．If they fill their time this way，they won't have too much spare time to think about phone entertainment．【高分句型二】（我的建議）

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