Question

3．假設(shè)你將代表你校2012屆初三畢業(yè)生在畢業(yè)典禮上發(fā)言，請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)寫一篇發(fā)言稿．
要點(diǎn)如下：

回顧	校園很美麗：每學(xué)期有豐富多彩的活動(dòng)，例如，2010玉樹地震過(guò)后，學(xué)校組織大家捐款，老師的教學(xué)生動(dòng)有趣，三年來(lái)學(xué)到很多，進(jìn)步很大
感謝	老師的培養(yǎng)，父母的支持，同學(xué)的幫助
祝愿	我希望…

注意事項(xiàng)：發(fā)言稿必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，要求語(yǔ)句通順、意思連貫；
最后一個(gè)要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮1-2句；
詞數(shù)90左右，發(fā)言稿的開頭和結(jié)尾均已給出，不加入總詞數(shù)．
Good afternoon，everyone!It is a great honor for me to make a speech on behalf of the graduating class of 2012．
Our school is very beautiful．We have colourful activities every term．For example，our school made a
donation after the earthquake last year．Our teachers always try to make their lessons lively and interesting．
We have learned a lot and made great progress during the last three years．We should thank our teachers for
their teaching，our parents for their support，our classmates for their help．I hope our school will be more
beautiful and everyone will have a good time here．
Thank you!

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是代表你校2012屆初三畢業(yè)生在畢業(yè)典禮上發(fā)言，回顧一下三年的生活和祝愿．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．回顧；校園很美麗：每學(xué)期有豐富多彩的活動(dòng)，例如，2010玉樹地震過(guò)后，學(xué)校組織大家捐款，老師的教學(xué)生動(dòng)有趣，三年來(lái)學(xué)到很多，進(jìn)步很大 
2． 感謝；老師的培養(yǎng)，父母的支持，同學(xué)的幫助 
3． 祝愿
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
made a donation"捐贈(zèng)"
try to do sth 盡力做某事
make+sth+adj 讓某物怎么樣
make progress 取得進(jìn)步
have a good time 玩得開心
【高分句型】
1．Our teachers always①try to②make their lessons lively and interesting．
①try to do sth 盡力做某事
②make+sth+adj 讓某物怎么樣
2．We should thank our teachers for their teaching，our parents for their support，our classmates for their help．
thank sb for…因?yàn)椤�感謝某人，for是介詞，后加名詞代詞或動(dòng)名詞．
3．I hope our school will be more beautiful and everyone will have a good time here
hope后是省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Good afternoon，everyone!It is a great honor for me to make a speech on behalf of the graduating class of 2012．
Our school is very beautiful．We have colourful activities every term．For example，our school made a donation after the earthquake last year．Our teachers always try to make their lessons lively and interesting．【高分句型】We have learned a lot and made great progress during the last three years．（回顧）We should thank our teachers for their teaching，our parents for their support，our classmates for their help．（感謝）【高分句型】I hope our school will be more beautiful and everyone will have a good time here．（祝愿）【高分句型】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這篇書面表達(dá)是根據(jù)要點(diǎn)來(lái)寫的，所以主要把要點(diǎn)都表達(dá)出來(lái)，注意單詞拼寫正確，語(yǔ)法沒(méi)有問(wèn)題，適當(dāng)使用恰當(dāng)?shù)木湫停�前面的回顧和感謝主要是結(jié)合要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行闡述，最后的祝愿是學(xué)生根據(jù)自己的情況進(jìn)行發(fā)揮，表現(xiàn)學(xué)生發(fā)散思維的能力．寫作時(shí)注意不同時(shí)態(tài)的運(yùn)用，例如回顧階段，主要是過(guò)去時(shí)，表示感謝時(shí)主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，祝愿當(dāng)然用一般將來(lái)時(shí)了．