Question

書面表達(dá)（20分）

據(jù)報(bào)道，有位貧窮的媽媽，這些年來得到許多好心人的幫助。她把每一筆捐贈都已記錄了下來，為的是讓女兒學(xué)會感恩。

請你寫一篇發(fā)言稿，要點(diǎn)如下：

1.簡述以上事件；

2.你的感想：感恩對每一個(gè)人都很重要；感謝父母的照顧，感謝老師的教育，感謝同學(xué)的幫助；

3.號召同學(xué)們做些感恩的事（列舉2個(gè)事例）

注意：1. 表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2. 演講稿應(yīng)包括上面所有要點(diǎn)，并作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

3. 詞數(shù)：100左右（文章開頭和結(jié)尾已給，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；

4. 短文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名，校名等相關(guān)信息。

Hello, everyone!

I’m here today to talk about being grateful to others. It is reported that

 

 

 

 

 

In a word, we should do what we can to express our thanks.

That’s all, thank you.

 

Answer 1

Hello, everyone!

I’m here today to talk about being grateful to others. It is reported that a poor mother has got/received a lot of help from others. She has written down every donation to let her daughter learn to be grateful/so that her daughter learns to be grateful.

I think it is important for everyone to learn to be grateful. Being grateful is very important to everyone. For example, we should thank our parents for caring for/taking care of/looking after us in daily life. We are supposed to be thankful to our teachers for educating us. We ought to be grateful to our classmates for their help.

So we should do something to others. We can help Mother do the housework, such as doing some cleaning, washing dishes, and doing some cooking. We can send some cards or flowers to our teachers on Teachers’ Day. We can also come back to visit our teacher after we graduate.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以感恩為主題寫一篇作文。在題目中給了我們這篇短文的寫作提綱，主要包括三部分的內(nèi)容。一是簡述貧窮媽媽這個(gè)事件；二是你的感想：感恩對每一個(gè)人都很重要；感謝父母的照顧，感謝老師的教育，感謝同學(xué)的幫助；三是號召同學(xué)們做些感恩的事（列舉2個(gè)事例）。提綱雖然已經(jīng)列好，但是很多內(nèi)容都需要我們自己去充實(shí)，讓它變得完整、合理，內(nèi)容豐富，這就需要花費(fèi)我們的想象力，以及我們平時(shí)積累的知識。另外，寫作時(shí)，還需注意語句間的銜接，使文意連貫，表達(dá)流暢。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇比較不錯(cuò)的作文。作者從三個(gè)方面，講述了我們要學(xué)會感恩，層次非常的清晰。短文中需要作者自己補(bǔ)充的內(nèi)容完成得也不錯(cuò)。如We can help Mother do the housework, such as doing some cleaning, washing dishes, doing some cooking. We can send some cards or flowers to our teachers on Teachers’ Day等。這些內(nèi)容都比較貼合文章的需要，意思也很連貫。文章中還用了一些比較好的句型，如For example, we should thank our parents for caring for/taking care of/looking after us in daily life. We are supposed to be thankful to our teachers for educating us.等。

考點(diǎn)：提綱類作文。