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14．中國(guó)夢(mèng)，就是中華民族的復(fù)興之夢(mèng)，是十三億中華兒女共同擁有的偉大夢(mèng)想．為了解同學(xué)們的理想，我們?cè)趯W(xué)校的100名學(xué)生中進(jìn)行了一次調(diào)查采訪．采訪主要是圍繞"What do you want to be when you grow up？"和"Why？"這兩個(gè)問題進(jìn)行的，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下調(diào)查數(shù)據(jù)寫一份以"the dream jobs"為題的報(bào)告，并讀讀你自己的理想與原因．詞數(shù)90個(gè)左右．（報(bào)告開頭語(yǔ)已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入作文總詞數(shù)．）

The Dream Jobs
In order to help us form good ideas（理想），we made a survey among 100students in our school．Here are the results．Most ofthem want to be businessmen．They think they will be rich．More of them want tobe doctors．They can save sick people．Some want to be teachers．They think theteachers can make people learn more knowledge．Some want to be policemen．Theythink the work is exciting．But some don't want to be policemen．They thinkthey are dangerous．But they believe the work is good for people．It can helpcatch the thieves．Some want to be nurses．They can help doctors and sickpeople．
Different students have different ideals．As for me，I want to be a policeman，and make our society much safer．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是根據(jù)調(diào)查數(shù)據(jù)寫一份以"the dream jobs"為題的報(bào)告，并讀讀你自己的理想與原因．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1.54% 商人；富有
2.28% 醫(yī)生，拯救病人
3.12% 老師，讓…學(xué)的更多
4.6% 其他工作
5我的理想和原因

常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
make sb do sth 讓某人做某事
want to be 想成為
be good for  對(duì)…有益
make …+adj 讓…怎么樣
【高分句型】
1．They think ①the teachers can②make people learn more knowledge．
①think后是省略了that的賓語(yǔ)從句．
②make sb do sth 讓某人做某事
2．But they believe①the work ②is good for people．
①①believe后是省略了that的賓語(yǔ)從句
②be good for  對(duì)…有益
3．As for me，I ①want to be a policeman，and②make our society much safer．
①want to be 想成為
②make …+adj 讓…怎么樣，much修飾比較級(jí)safer．

解答 In order to help us form good ideas，wemade a survey among 100 students in our school．Here are the results．
Most ofthem want to be businessmen．They think they will be rich．（54% 商人；富有）More of them want to be doctors．They can save sick people．（28% 醫(yī)生，拯救病人）Some want to be teachers．They think the teachers can make people learn more knowledge．【高分句型】（12% 老師，讓人們學(xué)的更多）Some want to be policemen．They think the work is exciting．But some don't want to be policemen．They think they are dangerous．But they believe the work is good for people．【高分句型】It can help catch the thieves．Some want to be nurses．They can help doctors and sick people．（6% 其他工作）
     Different students have different ideals．As for me，I want to be a policeman，and make our society much safer．【高分句型】（我的理想和理由）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇命題作文．在要點(diǎn)中給出了寫作的大致方向，需要自己發(fā)揮的地方較多．動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，確定時(shí)態(tài)主要詞匯等問題．寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．另外，在描述時(shí)，應(yīng)該注意人稱的變化．