Question

8．6月15日是父親節(jié)．請(qǐng)你以"My Father"為題，寫一篇短文．從性格、愛好等方面簡(jiǎn)略介紹一下你的父親，重點(diǎn)寫一個(gè)曾經(jīng)發(fā)生在你們之間的令人感動(dòng)的故事，并簡(jiǎn)要說明你將如何回報(bào)這如山的父愛．
  寫作要求：1．短文詳略得當(dāng)，條理清楚，行文連貫，邏輯性強(qiáng)，書寫規(guī)范；
            2．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和地名；
            3．詞數(shù)80詞左右．
參考詞匯：感動(dòng) move（v．） 回報(bào) in return （adv．）

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一
  When I was young，I used to fall ill．當(dāng)我小的時(shí)候，我經(jīng)常生病．  這是when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句，當(dāng)…時(shí)候，used to do sth．過去經(jīng)常做某事．
高分句型二
I hope he'll be healthy and happy forever．我希望他永遠(yuǎn)健康快樂．這是一個(gè)賓語從句，I hope是主句，后面的是賓語從句，注意時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)該用一般將來時(shí)，

解答 My father is a teacher，my most respectful person in the world．He is friendly，outgoing and energetic．In his spare time，he likes reading and doing exercise every day．He leads a healthy life，and he never smokes or drinks．【要點(diǎn)一，簡(jiǎn)略介紹父親】
When I was young，I used to fall ill．【高分句型一，注意時(shí)間狀語從句的使用】Once I was seriously ill in hospital，he looked after me all day and all night without any rest．After 10 days，I rrecovered，thanks to his great care．However，he fell ill．I was moved deeply by his great love．【要點(diǎn)二，曾經(jīng)發(fā)生的令人感動(dòng)的故事】
Father's Day is coming，I hope he'll be healthy and happy forever【高分句型二，注意賓語從句的使用】．And I'll make greater progress in return．【要點(diǎn)三，如何回報(bào)這如山的父愛】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇寫作需注意要求中所提供的要點(diǎn)，不可遺漏．需在平時(shí)積累相關(guān)的詞匯，寫作中注意語義通順，符合邏輯
關(guān)系．上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞．如but，so，then等．