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14．本學(xué)期開始，學(xué)校為了建設(shè)"文明校園"，開展了爭做"好學(xué)生"活動．請根據(jù)下表提示，以"Great changes in our school"為題，介紹學(xué)校開展活動以來同學(xué)們所發(fā)生的變化，并談?wù)勀愕母邢耄?br />

活動前	活動后
隨意亂扔垃圾， 對師長不夠禮貌， …	…
你的感想…

注意：1．詞數(shù)不少于80．文章的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)．
2．要點完整、層次清晰、語法正確、上下文連貫．
3．文中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校和本人姓名．
Great changes in our school
The activity of being a good student has been held since the beginning of this term in our school．Everybody has taken an active part in it．
In the past，we didn't have the habit of keeping our classroom clean and even threw waste everywhere．We weren't polite enough to our teachers and parents．Sometimes we were unwilling to greet them．While waiting for a bus or doing shopping，some of us jumped the queue instead of waiting in line．
But now，everyone is active in cleaning and doesn't throw waste freely any more．We show great respect for our teachers and parents．When we are in public places，we wait in line and offer our seats to the people in need．
The activity has brought us many advantages．Our school has changed a lot．The school is becoming more and more beautiful．More and more students have formed good habits．And we hope every student can keep these good habits．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是以"Great changes in our school"為題，介紹學(xué)校開展活動以來同學(xué)們所發(fā)生的變化，并談?wù)勀愕母邢耄畷r態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1． 活動前；隨意亂扔垃圾，對師長不夠禮貌，
2．活動后；
3．我的感想

常用到的重點短語：
take part in 參加
be unwilling to do sth 不情愿做某事
instead of 而不是…
not…any more 不再
offer sth to sb 給某人提供某物
比較級+and+比較級  越來越…
【高分句型】
1．We weren't polite enough to our teachers and parents．
not+adj+enough to do sth 不夠怎樣做某事
2．①While waiting for a bus or doing shopping，some of us ②jumped the queue ③instead of waiting in line．
①While waiting for a bus or doing shopping是while we are waiting for a bus or doing shopping．的縮寫
②jump the queue插隊
③instead of 而不是…，of是介詞，后加名詞代詞或動名詞．wait in line 排隊等候
3．①When we are in public places，we wait in line and ②offer our seats to the people ③in need．
①when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句
②offer sth to sb 給某人提供某物
③in need 作為后置定語，修飾people．

解答 The activity of being a good student has been held since the beginning of this term in our school．Everybody has taken an active part in it．
In the past，we didn't have the habit of keeping our classroom clean and even threw waste everywhere．We weren't polite enough to our teachers and parents．【高分句型】Sometimes we were unwilling to greet them．While waiting for a bus or doing shopping，some of us jumped the queue instead of waiting in line．【高分句型】（活動前）
But now，everyone is active in cleaning and doesn't throw waste freely any more．We show great respect for our teachers and parents．When we are in public places，we wait in line and offer our seats to the people in need．【高分句型】（活動后）
    The activity has brought us many advantages．Our school has changed a lot．The school is becoming more and more beautiful．More and more students have formed good habits．And we hope every student can keep these good habits．（我的感想）

點評 作文中給出的要點比較簡略，故需要充實文章內(nèi)容，需要注意不要偏離文章中心．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式．此外還要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞把句子串聯(lián)起來，使文章更加連貫．
動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點，理解要點要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題．平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．并且注意字?jǐn)?shù)限制