Question

假設(shè)你是David，九年級(jí)學(xué)生。你打算寫一篇介紹自己近況的短文，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的要點(diǎn)提示，說(shuō)明自己的情況，并談?wù)勛约旱男脑�。詞數(shù)100詞左右.

要點(diǎn)提示：

性格	勤勞，從不介意為班級(jí)多做一些額外工作，樂(lè)于助人；
喜好	最喜歡電影明星成龍，認(rèn)為他是世界上最有天賦的演員之一，喜歡買與他有關(guān)的書籍，CD等；
麻煩	無(wú)法做到既認(rèn)真學(xué)習(xí)又有時(shí)間從事自己的愛好，父母不理解他，只關(guān)心考試后的分?jǐn)?shù)。
心愿	(1)…; (2) …

My name is David.

 

Answer 1

My name is David. I’m a student of Grade Nine./I’m a Grade Nine/9 student. I’m helpful and hard-working. I never mind doing extra work for my class.

I have many hobbies, such as/for example, playing basketball, reading, swimming. To tell you the truth, I like watching/seeing films best./My favourite hobby is watching/seeing films. My favourite film star is Jacky Chan. I think he is one of the most talented actors in the world. I like buying books and CDs about him. I spend most of my pocket money on them. But my parents don’t understand me. They only care about my marks after tests. I can’t achieve a balance between my hobbies and study.

I wish my parents could understand me./I hope my parents can understand me. I need their support and understanding. I plan to talk with my teachers, my friends or youth workers about my problems. Maybe I can get help from them.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇表格作文。本文要求按照題目要求結(jié)合表格中的內(nèi)容完成這篇自我介紹的作文寫作，我們要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z(yǔ)言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)出來(lái)。寫作中要包含自己的情況，其中包括性格、喜好和遇到的麻煩，以及自己的心愿等幾個(gè)方面進(jìn)行陳述等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱主要是第一人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫作中注意上下文的過(guò)度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文簡(jiǎn)明、扼要地闡明了自己的基本信息，并包含了表格中所要求的基本信息，并表達(dá)出了自己的心愿。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語(yǔ)，連接詞和過(guò)渡語(yǔ)的使用為文章增色不少.如I never mind doing extra work，To tell you the truth,，one of the most talented actors in the world，achieve a balance between my hobbies and study，plan to talk with my teachers，But，such as/for example, I think， only，Maybe，學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ)，寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。