Question

4月是踏青旅游的好時(shí)間，上周周末，你和你的父母去了杭州游玩，請你根據(jù)所給提示寫一篇短文介紹游玩的一些情況。要求語言通順，意思連貫，必須包括所給內(nèi)容，可圍繞主題適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，詞數(shù)不得少于70個(gè)詞。

When	last weekend
Where	Hangzhou
Who	I、my parents
How	two hours , by train , comfortable…
What	visit: Western Lake、Hangzhou Amusement Park (杭州樂園)、Lingyin Temple(靈隱寺)… … eat: delicious food … … go shopping : the biggest shopping centre , buy many things … …
Feeling	very happy ,want to go there next year
… …

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

I went to Hang Zhou with my parents last weekend.We went there by train,because by train was very comfortable.It took us two hours to go there. We visited Western Lake、Hang Zhou Amusement Park、Lingyin Temple and so on. We ate some delicious food .And we went to the biggest shopping centre to buy many things.We felt very happy . So I wanted to go there next year.

【解析】

試題分析：考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示認(rèn)真審題，確定文章的中心。注意文章文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。本文主要應(yīng)用一般過去時(shí)，所以在寫作時(shí)，要尤其一般過去時(shí)的表達(dá)方式。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。溫馨提醒：考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】這篇短文使用了一些固定句式和短語，為文章增色不少.如: It took us two hours to go there. we went to the biggest shopping centre to buy many things.學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。