Question

5．學(xué)校將要舉行演講比賽，請(qǐng)以My Dream為題寫一篇參賽演講稿．注意：1．文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校． 2．詞數(shù)：80歌左右． 3．開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
My dream
Hi，everyoneEverybody has his dream job．I also have my dream job．My dream is to work for foreign tourists as a tour guide．
Why do I want to be a tour guide？First of all，I‘m an outgoing girl，and I like doing some exciting things．Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice．If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country．Then I will tell the foreign tourists about our colorful history．Second，I like making friends．If I work as a tour guide，I can make a lot of friends all over the world．This may be great．Perhaps someday my foreign friends will ask me to visit their countries．I really like to go to their countries to know something about their culture．What's more，I like singing．Singing English songs is my favorite．I believe I will be popular with foreign tourists．Their trip will be excellent．
Now，I am still a middle school student．My job now is to work hard in school．Then I'll go to university to learn something about being a tour guide．I'm sure I can be a qualified tour guide in the future．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇命題作文．內(nèi)容以My Dream為題寫一篇參賽演講稿．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般將來時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從兩個(gè)大的方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．夢(mèng)想是什么．
2．為什么有這樣的夢(mèng)想
3．怎樣實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
want to be想要成為
First of all，Second，What's more首先，第二，更有甚者．
make friends交朋友
be popular with受歡迎
work hard努力學(xué)習(xí)
learn about學(xué)習(xí)關(guān)于…
in the future將來
高分句型：
Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice．
本句是動(dòng)名詞短語being a tour guide 作為主語，謂語用is．還用最高級(jí)best來總結(jié)上文給出的原因說這是最好的選擇．
If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country．
本句是運(yùn)用了if引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句，主句含有情態(tài)動(dòng)詞，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)代替一般將來．

解答 Hi，everyone．Everybody has his dream job．I also have my dream job．My dream is to work for foreign tourists as a tour guide．（夢(mèng)想是什么．）
Why do I want to be a tour guide？First of all，I‘m an outgoing girl，and I like doing some exciting things．Maybe being a tour guide is the best choice．（高分句型）If I become a tour guide，I can travel all around China，and know more about our country．（高分句型）Then I will tell the foreign tourists about our colorful history．Second，I like making friends．If I work as a tour guide，I can make a lot of friends all over the world．This may be great．Perhaps someday my foreign friends will ask me to visit their countries．I really like to go to their countries to know something about their culture．What's more，I like singing．Singing English songs is my favorite．I believe I will be popular with foreign tourists．Their trip will be excellent．（為什么有這樣的夢(mèng)想）
Now，I am still a middle school student．My job now is to work hard in school．Then I'll go to university to learn something about being a tour guide．I'm sure I can be a qualified tour guide in the future．（怎樣實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇命題作文，要求同學(xué)們先根據(jù)題目列出提綱以及寫作要點(diǎn)．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會(huì)造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，行文間要注意簡(jiǎn)化描述，用簡(jiǎn)短的語句代替冗長(zhǎng)的語句．在作文完成的時(shí)候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．