Question

書面表達（15分）

假如你將代表你校2011屆畢業(yè)生在學校畢業(yè)典禮上發(fā)言，請你用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿，發(fā)言稿的內(nèi)容要點如下。

回顧	美麗的校園、生動有趣的教學、三年來的收獲
感謝	老師的培養(yǎng)、父母的支持、同學的幫助
祝愿	考生自擬，至少兩點

注意：1. 詞數(shù)80左右，發(fā)言稿的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；

2. 發(fā)言稿須包含所有要點，不要逐句翻譯，可適當發(fā)揮，使短文連貫、通順；發(fā)言稿不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名、校名等相關(guān)信息。

Good afternoon, my dear teachers and fellow（同年級的）graduates. It is a great honor for me to make a speech on behalf（代表……）of the graduating class of 2011.

 

 

 

Thank you for listening.

 

Answer 1

Good afternoon, my dear teachers and fellow（同年級的）graduates.

It is a great honor for me to make a speech on behalf（代表……）of the graduating class of 2011. It has been three great years for us to study in this beautiful school. Our teachers always try to make their lessons lively and interesting. We have learned a lot over these years, but we could hardly succeed without our teacher’s effort, our parents’ support and our classmates’ help. At this moment，I’d like to thank all of you for what you have done for us.

I wish our school more beautiful and all of us a wonderful future! Goodbye, our beautiful school, our dear teachers and our friends.

Thank you for listening.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們根據(jù)表格中的內(nèi)容寫一篇發(fā)言稿。在題目中給了我們這篇短文的寫作提綱，主要包括三部分的內(nèi)容。一是回顧學校生活，如美麗的校園、生動有趣的教學、三年來的收獲；二是表達感謝，如老師的培養(yǎng)、父母的支持、同學的幫助；最后是表達祝愿。提綱雖然已經(jīng)列好，但是很多內(nèi)容都需要我們自己去充實，讓它變得完整、合理，內(nèi)容豐富，這就需要花費我們的想象力，以及我們平時積累的知識。另外，寫作時，還需注意語句間的銜接，使文意連貫，表達流暢。

【亮點說明】這是一篇比較不錯的作文。作者從三個方面做了很好的發(fā)言，層次非常的清晰。短文中需要作者自己補充的內(nèi)容完成得也不錯。如I wish our school more beautiful and all of us a wonderful future! Goodbye, our beautiful school, our dear teachers and our friends.等。這些內(nèi)容都比較貼合文章的需要，意思也很連貫。文章中還用了一些比較好的句型，如We have learned a lot over these years, but we could hardly succeed without our teacher’s effort, our parents’ support and our classmates’ help.等。

考點：提綱類作文。