Question

11．假如你是初三學(xué)生李華，近日你發(fā)現(xiàn)校園里學(xué)生吃零食現(xiàn)象非常嚴(yán)重．根據(jù)圖表信息，請(qǐng)你以"校園拒絕零食"為主題，寫一封倡議書．

寫作要求：
1．根據(jù)圖表信息進(jìn)行寫作，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，以使行文連貫；
 2．詞數(shù)80-100．文章開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
3．文中不得出現(xiàn)與考生本人相關(guān)的真實(shí)姓名、校名和地名等信息．
參考詞匯：零食 snacks           包裝袋 wrappers

Dear students，
Recently，a lot of students eat snacks at school．It has caused serious problems．Some students are spending much money on snacks．Eating snacks is a waste of money．It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．In addition，most snacks have too much fat and sugar．They are unhealthy food．Eating too much may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw wrappers everywhere．As middle school students，we shouldn't eat snacks any more．
Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．
Yours sincerely，Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"校園拒絕零食"為主題，寫一封倡議書．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1零食的危害：污染環(huán)境、浪費(fèi)錢、無益健康；
2我們應(yīng)該采取的行動(dòng)
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
spend+金錢+on sth  花錢做某事
a waste of 浪費(fèi)
get rid of 放棄
in addition 另外
too much  太多
what's worse 糟糕的是
【高分句型】
1．Eating snacks is a waste of money．    
動(dòng)名詞短語做主語，謂語動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)is．
2．It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．
it是形式主語，that從句是真正主語．
3．Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．       
let's do sth 讓我們做某事．提出建議．

解答 Dear students，
Recently，a lot of students eat snacks at school．It has caused serious problems．Some students are spending much money on snacks．Eating snacks is a waste of money．【高分句型】It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．【高分句型】In addition，most snacks have too much fat and sugar．They are unhealthy food．Eating too much may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw wrappers everywhere．（零食的危害）As middle school students，we shouldn't eat snacks any more．
Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．【高分句型】（我們應(yīng)該采取的行動(dòng)）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本題要求以中學(xué)生李華的名義，以"校園拒絕零食"為主題，寫一封倡議書．根據(jù)圖表提示，短文應(yīng)從吃零食的危害：污染環(huán)境、浪費(fèi)錢、無益健康；我們應(yīng)該采取的行動(dòng)等等方面展開寫作．短文要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)及帶有情態(tài)動(dòng)詞的句子，用第一稱形式進(jìn)行表達(dá)．作為一封倡議書，要注意思想積極健康，語言精煉簡捷．短文用dear稱呼學(xué)生，配合情態(tài)動(dòng)詞should，語言親切，感染力強(qiáng)．短文首先指出了學(xué)校許多學(xué)生吃零食的現(xiàn)象，并總體指出其造成了嚴(yán)重的問題．然后從浪費(fèi)錢、無益健康、污染環(huán)境幾方面講述吃零食的危害．層次清楚．其中用了動(dòng)名詞短語作主語、主語從句等等語法結(jié)構(gòu)，具體生動(dòng)；最后倡議大家：不再吃零食，拒絕零食．主旨鮮明，主題突出．