Question

7．假如這幅漫畫表現(xiàn)的是你經(jīng)歷的事情，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)所給提示描述事情經(jīng)過并談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ?br />
提示詞：jaywalk vi．亂穿馬路；run the red light闖紅燈
注意：文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名．詞數(shù)80-100．
Friday afternoon，when I was on my way home from school，I saw a group of people jaywalking at the crossing．A volunteer tried to stop them，but no one listened to him．Instead，they ran the red light quickly．Just then，a bus came．One of them was nearly hit by the running bus．
In my opinion，jaywalking is a bad habit．It puts not only yourself but also other people in danger．I hope all of us should keep the traffic rules and stop running the red light．Look both sides/ways when you cross the road．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖畫作文．內(nèi)容是請(qǐng)你根據(jù)漫畫所描述的事情經(jīng)過并談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ畷r(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過去時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．描述圖畫；一群人亂闖馬路，有人去阻止，不搭理，有一位差點(diǎn)被撞倒
2．我的看法；
 
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
on one's way to sp 某人去某地的路上
see sb doing sth 看見某人正在做某事
try to do sth 盡力做某事
not only…but also…不僅…而且…
in danger 處于危險(xiǎn)中

【高分句型】
1．It puts①not only yourself but also other people②in danger．
①not only…but also…不僅…而且…
②in danger 處于危險(xiǎn)中
2．I hope①all of us should keep the traffic rules and②stop running the red light．
①hope后是省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句．
②stop doing sth 停止做某事
3．Look both sides/ways when you cross the road．
when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句

解答 Friday afternoon，when I was on my way home from school，I saw a group of people jaywalking at the crossing．A volunteer tried to stop them，but no one listened to him．Instead，they ran the red light quickly．Just then，a bus came．One of them was nearly hit by the running bus．（描述圖畫）
In my opinion，jaywalking is a bad habit．It puts not only yourself but also other people in danger．【高分句型】I hope all of us should keep the traffic rules and stop running the red light．【高分句型】Look both sides/ways when you cross the road【高分句型】（我的看法）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇看圖作文．由于是描述過去的經(jīng)歷，故用一般過去時(shí)態(tài)，根據(jù)要求用第一人稱．
這篇短文層次分明，語(yǔ)言流暢，能把要點(diǎn)表達(dá)清楚．In my opinion，not only…but also等的應(yīng)用給短文增色不少．