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8．你覺得你的校園生活安全嗎？請(qǐng)你寫一篇題為"How to Keep Safe in School"的短文．談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ?br />內(nèi)容包括：
1．描述一件發(fā)生在你身上或你看到的發(fā)生在校園的意外事件（經(jīng)過與結(jié)果）．
2．提出解決這種校園意外事件的建議（至少兩條）．
3．呼吁每個(gè)學(xué)生要注意校園安全．
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How to Keep Safe in School
Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough？For example．one day，two students ran after each other in the hallway．Suddenly，one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor．So，he had to stay in hospital for two weeks．
So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways．And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running．
At last，I hope all the students should pay attention to their safety in school．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"How to Keep Safe in School"為題談?wù)剬?duì)校園安全的看法．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．描述一件發(fā)生在你身上或你看到的發(fā)生在校園的意外事件（經(jīng)過與結(jié)果）．
2．提出解決這種校園意外事件的建議（至少兩條）．
3．呼吁每個(gè)學(xué)生要注意校園安全．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
because of 因?yàn)椤?br />run after each other彼此追趕
fall down 摔倒
had better do sth最好做某事
keep an eye on關(guān)注…
stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
pay attention to注意…
高分句型：
So I think ①students should always walk ②but not run in the hallways．
①省略了that的賓語從句，作為think的賓語．
②but not而不是，后面的動(dòng)詞run與前面的run動(dòng)詞形式一致．
And the teachers①had better ②keep an eye on the students after class and ③stop them from running．
①had better do sth最好做某事
②keep an eye on照看； 照管； 留心； 注意
③stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
and 連接兩個(gè)并列的動(dòng)詞原形短語，構(gòu)成had better do sth

解答 How to Keep Safe in School
Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough？For example，one day，two students ran after each other in the hallway．Suddenly，one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor．So，he had to stay in hospital for two weeks．（經(jīng)過與結(jié)果）
So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways．（高分句型）And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running．（高分句型）（建議）
At last，I hope all the students should pay attention to their safety in school．（呼吁）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文是一篇給材料作文，短文的開頭已經(jīng)給出．寫作時(shí)先要圍繞這些要點(diǎn)組織材料，確定寫作內(nèi)容，注意將這些要點(diǎn)全部表達(dá)出來，并且要有適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，在談到自己的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，要結(jié)合活動(dòng)內(nèi)容，寫出自己的觀點(diǎn)．