Question

My mother

提示：母愛(ài)情深，母愛(ài)無(wú)價(jià)，學(xué)會(huì)感恩，學(xué)會(huì)回報(bào)。媽媽給了你無(wú)限的愛(ài)，你肯定把這份深情牢計(jì)在心，寫一篇短文，介紹自己的母親和你們的真情故事。

要求：1.短文記敘你媽媽為你所做的一切，表達(dá)你對(duì)她的情感。你想對(duì)她說(shuō)的話，你將為她做什么。字?jǐn)?shù)不少于100個(gè)。

2.語(yǔ)言流暢，書寫規(guī)范，卷面整潔。

3.不得使用真實(shí)的人名或?qū)W校名稱。

 

Answer 1

My mother

My mother is a kind and gentle woman. She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school. I have one brother and two sisters. So she gets four children in all. She gives us every comfort. We all love her and she loves us, too.

My mother has too much to do every day. She has to get up early in the morning and prepare breakfast for us. As our family is not rich, she has always to do very much work. She sleeps very late in the evening. She works hard without complaining.

She is very thrifty. She save every cent that she can and keeps everything in order. As she works hard for many years, her face is wrinkled, her hair becomes silver white, but she works as hard as ever.

She often says, work while you work, play while you play. What piece of good advice this is! I must keep it in my mind.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以My mother 為題目寫一篇作文，體會(huì)母愛(ài)，學(xué)會(huì)感恩，學(xué)會(huì)回報(bào)。短文中要對(duì)自己的媽媽進(jìn)行一個(gè)介紹，寫寫媽媽為你做的事情，表達(dá)你對(duì)她的情感，把你要對(duì)媽媽說(shuō)的話告訴她。所以這是一篇記敘文，文章中要記敘媽媽為你做的事情，把你對(duì)這些事情的感受，對(duì)媽媽的感激之情表達(dá)出來(lái)。寫作時(shí)應(yīng)主要使用第三人稱，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。如果舉例的話，用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。注意表達(dá)的流暢，語(yǔ)句的連貫。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇作文寫得還是比較不錯(cuò)的。在短文中作者介紹了自己的母親的性格，以及母親在家里辛勤工作的辛苦。從這些點(diǎn)滴的小事中可以感受到母親對(duì)孩子的愛(ài)。這篇作文內(nèi)容完整，記敘的事實(shí)清楚，也有作者對(duì)這些的感受，對(duì)媽媽的愛(ài)。文章中比較好的句子，如She takes good care of her children and keeps them all at school.、We all love her and she loves us, too.、She has to get up early in the morning and prepare breakfast for us.、What piece of good advice this is!等。

考點(diǎn)：開(kāi)放性作文。