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【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)。Dear all,

假如你是你校學(xué)生會(huì)主席李浩，號(hào)召同學(xué)們?yōu)橥趿巅x躍捐款。

王玲是第二中學(xué)的學(xué)生，八年級(jí)一班的班長(zhǎng)，今年14歲，平時(shí)學(xué)習(xí)刻苦，成績(jī)優(yōu)秀。她的爸爸是位工人，媽媽是位農(nóng)民。她家境貧寒�，F(xiàn)在她患重病住院，需要手術(shù)。希望大家踴躍捐款，這樣她就可以接受手術(shù)（手術(shù)費(fèi)約十萬(wàn)元），很快恢復(fù)健康。

要求： 1、不能逐條翻譯所給信息，可以適當(dāng)增減內(nèi)容；

2、短文中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實(shí)地名、人名和校名；

3、詞數(shù)100字左右。文章開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，但不計(jì)入總字?jǐn)?shù)。

Give a helping hand

Dear all,

A student from NO.2 Middle School needs our help!

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_____________________________________________________________________________Thanks a lot for your help!

Li Hao

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

Give a helping hand

A student from NO.2 Middle School needs our help! Her name is Wang Ling, monitor of Class 1, Grade 8.She is fourteen years old. She often works hard and she is good at all subjects. Her father is a worker and her mother is a farmer. She has a poor family. Now she suffers from bad illnesses and is in hospital. She needs to be operated on. Because the expense of the operation is about 100000 yuan. I hope everyone will donate money to her actively, so that she can get the operation in time and she will recover soon .

Thanks a lot for your help!

Li Hao

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，介紹號(hào)召同學(xué)們?yōu)橥趿巅x躍捐錢(qián)。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱為單數(shù)第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)和動(dòng)賓結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見(jiàn)句式的應(yīng)用，比如：Her name is…， Her father is …，She has...，Because the expense of the operation is ...，I hope ...等句式的應(yīng)用。寫(xiě)作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫(xiě)作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系.

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開(kāi)頭介紹了需要捐錢(qián)的學(xué)生名字，接下來(lái)介紹王玲的學(xué)習(xí)和遭受的困難，最后希望大家積極捐錢(qián)，并謝謝大家的幫助。此處work hard, be good at, suffer from, be in hospital, need to do sth, operate on, donate ...to...等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。