Question

我們的家鄉(xiāng)南京，是一個有山有水的美麗城市。“春日蕩槳玄武湖，夏日賞荷三好亭。秋日棲霞看楓葉，冬日鐘山訪雪梅。”南京的四季分明，每個季節(jié)都有它的獨特的魅力。請你寫一篇短文，內(nèi)容包括：

我最喜愛的季節(jié)，這個季節(jié)的特點，以及我喜愛的原因。

在這個季節(jié)里，我們可以到南京的哪些地方玩以及可以做的活動。

參考詞匯：玄武湖 Xuanwu Lake Park 夫子廟 The Confucius Temple

中山陵 Sun Yat-sen's Mausoleum 梅花山Plum Blossom Hill 棲霞山 Mount Qixia

 

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

I have lived in Nanjing since I was born. I love this city because of the four unique seasons. Among the four seasons, I love summer best. Though it is very hot, sometimes over 38℃, we can enjoy the wandering under the tall and almost 50-year-old trees ,cool breeze from the shade above our head. In Nanjing’summer, it often rains heavily when you cannot bear the heat.

In summer holiday, we can go to many places of interest to have fun. For example, I love to go to Xuanwu Lake Park to go boating on the lake and watch the yellow or red lotuses. If we are lucky enough, we can see fish swim around quickly. When we are tired, we often go to the underground station to enjoy free cool air. At night, we can go to the Confucius Temple to enjoy some Nanjing snacks and colourful lights there. How happy we are to live in Nanjing!

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，題目中給出的材料較為齊全。寫作中注意將喜愛南京的原因及一年四季的活動介紹清楚。根據(jù)材料可知，本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，第一人稱進行敘述，寫作中主語時態(tài)及主謂一致等問題。注意不要遺漏要點，做到語句通順。為了使意思更加連貫可適當(dāng)使用連接詞。

【亮點說明】本文在寫作中使用了很多固定句式，如：Because of因為；for example例如；go boating去劃船；作者并且在寫作中多次使用了連接詞if，如果，when當(dāng)……時等，使得本文看起來邏輯清楚，條理分明。所以在學(xué)習(xí)中，我們應(yīng)注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.

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