Question

【題目】每個人的生命只有一次，一定要珍愛自己的生命。該怎樣安全自救？請根據(jù)以下提示，以How to Protect Ourselves為標題寫一篇發(fā)言稿。

安全對每個人都很重要	交通：外出時遵守交通規(guī)則
	食品：吃健康食物，少吃垃圾食品
	活動：體育鍛煉時，不要弄傷自己		不私自下河游泳
自救是重要的技能之一	交友需謹慎	遠離危險之人
	遇到危險保持冷靜	然后要及時報警或向老師、家長求助		盡可能避免受傷害 保證自己的安全

參考詞匯：

要求：

1. 語言表達準確，短文連貫、通順。

2. 短文應包括所有內(nèi)容，可適當發(fā)揮，不要逐句翻譯。

3．詞數(shù)80左右。文章開頭部分已給出，不計人總詞數(shù)。

Dear friends,

Everyone has only one life, we should treasure our lives. But how can we protect ourselves?

Here are some suggestions.

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In a word, we should try our best to protect ourselves and value our lives.

That’s all. Thank you !

Answer 1

【答案】例文

Dear friends，

Everyone has only one life， we should treasure our lives． But how can we protect ourselves？

Here are some suggestions．

　 On the one hand， we should realize the importance of safety and know what to do． First，when we go out， we must follow traffic rules． If we walk，we must use sidewalks and mustn't run a red light；If we ride bikes，we must ride along the right side and shouldn't carry others；Second， we should develop a healthy eating habits． Eat regular meals every day and try not to eat junk food or eat less．When food smells bad， don't eat it．Third，when we play sports or games， be careful not to hurt ourselves．Fourth，we mustn't swim in rivers without our parents or other adults around．

　On the other hand， we should learn to protect ourselves， which is one of the most important living skills． We must be careful when making friends especially online．Some persons online are not honest．They are dangerous， so we must keep away from them． If we happen to have trouble， we should keep calm and remember to ask our parents， teachers or police for help so that we can protect ourselves from danger or being hurt．

　 In a word， we should try our best to protect ourselves and value our lives．

That's all． Thank you !

【解析】

本文屬于材料作文，要表達安全很重要以及如何自救。根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定并準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯，可適當增加內(nèi)容。

亮點說明：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，很好的完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，語言表達符合英語習慣，準確運用時態(tài)、主謂一致，特別使用一些亮點詞句，如the importance of, one of the+形容詞最高級+名詞復數(shù)，keep away from, keep calm, ask sb for help, so that, on the one hand, on the other hand以及first, second, third, fourth等，增強邏輯關(guān)系，增加上下文意思連貫，用詞準確，句子通順，行文連貫。