Question

15．根據(jù)要求完成大作文，詞數(shù)：80-100詞．
我們即將迎來(lái)輕松又豐富多彩的假期生活，同學(xué)們一定會(huì)安排各種活動(dòng)，比如宅家、聚會(huì)、外出旅行等．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)如下提示，寫(xiě)一常英文短文，發(fā)布在班級(jí) QQ群中，提醒同子們注意安全．可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
內(nèi)容提示：

Activities	Suggestions
stay at home	keep away from fire
have a party	come back home by 10 o'clock
go out	follow the traffic rules
…	…

參考詞匯：Safety must come first（安全第一）．
注：開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和地名．
In our daily life，there's always something unexpected．So we must pay more attention to our safety in our coming vacation．When we stay at home，we are supposed to stay away from fire，and make sure doors and windows are shut before we leave．If we have a party，it's safe to come back home by 10 o'clock at night．And we had better not make friends with strangers when we go out for a trip．We must be careful when we take photos and climb the mountains
We should follow the traffic rules when walking across the road．Besides，remember it's dangerous to swim alone in the river
All in all，safety must come first!Have a happy and safe vacation!．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是在班級(jí)QQ群中發(fā)布提示，提醒大家注意假期間的安全．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱(chēng)主要為第一人稱(chēng)．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1宅家：遠(yuǎn)離火
2聚會(huì)：10點(diǎn)前回家
3外出旅行：遵守交通規(guī)則
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
pay attention to 關(guān)注
be supposed to do sth 應(yīng)該做某事
stay away from 遠(yuǎn)離
had better do sth 最好做某事
all in all 總之
【高分句型】
1．①When we stay at home，we ②are supposed to stay away from fire，and ③make sure ④doors and windows are shut ⑤before we leave．
①when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
②be supposed to do sth 應(yīng)該做某事
③make sure 確定
④省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為make sure的賓語(yǔ)．
⑤before引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．

2．We should follow the traffic rules when walking across the road．
when walking across the road是省略句，完整表達(dá)是when we walk across the road．

3．①Besides，remember②it's dangerous to swim alone in the river．
①besides 另外
②省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為remember的賓語(yǔ)．it是形式主語(yǔ)，動(dòng)詞不定式是真正主語(yǔ)．

解答 In our daily life，there's always something unexpected．So we must pay more attention to our safety in our coming vacation．When we stay at home，we are supposed to stay away from fire，and make sure doors and windows are shut before we leave．【高分句型】（宅家：遠(yuǎn)離火，離開(kāi)關(guān)門(mén)窗）If we have a party，it's safe to come back home by 10 o'clock at night．（聚會(huì)：10點(diǎn)前回家）And we had better not make friends with strangers when we go out for a trip．We must be careful when we take photos and climb the mountains．We should follow the traffic rules when walking across the road．【高分句型】Besides，remember it's dangerous to swim alone in the river【高分句型】（外出旅行，不和陌生人交朋友，遵守交通規(guī)則，不獨(dú)自在河里游泳等）
All in all，safety must come first!Have a happy and safe vacation!（總結(jié)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本題是一篇提綱作文，要求在班級(jí)QQ群中發(fā)布提示，提醒大家注意假期間的安全，要求從"呆在家、參加晚會(huì)、外出"等方面告誡大家注意相關(guān)的安全事項(xiàng)．短文主要用一般將來(lái)時(shí)態(tài)，可以用if引出的條件狀語(yǔ)從句來(lái)假設(shè)不同的情況下的安全注意事項(xiàng)．可以用第一人稱(chēng)或用些祈使句來(lái)進(jìn)行表達(dá)．短文第一段開(kāi)篇點(diǎn)題：我們要多注意假期安全；第二段從幾個(gè)不同的方面說(shuō)明分別要注意哪些安全問(wèn)題．用when，if，we must，we should，besides等等開(kāi)頭，分別表述了不同方面的安全．層次清楚，要點(diǎn)分明，讓人一目了然．其中的be supposed to，had better等短語(yǔ)，不定式作主語(yǔ)的句型、分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)的表達(dá)方式等等都為本文增色不少．第三段畫(huà)龍點(diǎn)睛：安全必須放在首位．并祝大家假期快樂(lè)、安全．首尾呼應(yīng)，主旨鮮明．