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4．中學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)時間長、壓力大，專家建議學(xué)生每天課后應(yīng)采取適當(dāng)?shù)姆绞椒潘勺约海�假設(shè)你是九年級3班的班長，最近你對班上同學(xué)課后放松方式進(jìn)行了調(diào)查．請根據(jù)表格提供的調(diào)查信息和要求寫一篇短文．

對   象	九年級3班
人   數(shù)	60人（男：31人；女：29人）
常用放松方式	1．看電視（30人） 2．玩電腦游戲或者上網(wǎng)與同學(xué)聊天（12人） 3．聽音樂（8人） 4．進(jìn)行體育鍛煉（5人） 5．沒有時間放松（5人）
你的觀點(diǎn)	哪一種（些）放松方式是適當(dāng)?shù)�？為什么�?/TD>

The Proper Way（s） for Students to Relax
I am the monitor of Class 3，Grade 9，No.1Middle School．Recently I have made a survey of the students in my class on ways to relax after class．
There are60 students in my class（31 boys and 29 girls）．Different students have different ways to relax.30 students often watch TV.12 students like to play computer gamesor chat with classmates on the Internet while8 enjoy listening to music．5 students think doing sports is a good way and another five are too busy to relax．
I think taking exercise is a proper way because it can rest our brains and eyes．Besides，it can keep us healthy．So，I often play ping-pong after class．It's really helpful to both my health and my study．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是依據(jù)"學(xué)生適當(dāng)?shù)姆潘煞绞?的調(diào)查談?wù)剬W(xué)生們常見的放松方式以及自己的觀點(diǎn)．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1人數(shù)：60人（男：31人；女：29人）
2常用放松方式：1）．看電視（30人）2）．玩電腦游戲或者上網(wǎng)與同學(xué)聊天（12人）3）．聽音樂（8人）4）．進(jìn)行體育鍛煉（5人）5）．沒有時間放松（5人）
3你的觀點(diǎn)：哪一種（些）放松方式是適當(dāng)?shù)模繛槭裁矗?br />常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
because of 因?yàn)椤?br />be tired of…厭倦…
make sb do sth讓某人做某事
talk with sb 與…交流
make a plan 制定計(jì)劃
find out 找出
in a word 總之
try one's best to do sth 竭盡全力做某事
【高分句型】
1.12 students like to play computer games  or chat with classmates on the Internet while 8 enjoy listening to music．
while 然而，表前后的對比
2.5 students think①②doing sports is a good way and another five are ③too busy to relax．
①省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語從句．
②動名詞短語做主語，謂語動詞用單數(shù)is．
③too+adj/adv+to do sth 太…而不能做某事
3．I think①②taking exercise is a proper way③because it can rest our brains and eyes．
①省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語從句．
②動名詞短語做主語，謂語動詞用單數(shù)is．
③because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句．

解答 The Proper Way（s） for Students to Relax
I am the monitor of Class 3，Grade 9，No.27 Middle School．Recently I have made a survey of the students in my class on ways to relax after class．
There are 60 students in my class （31 boys and 29 girls）．（人數(shù)）Different students have different ways to relax.30 students often watch TV.12 students like to play computer games  or chat with classmates on the Internet while 8 enjoy listening to music．【高分句型】5 students think doing sports is a good way and another five are too busy to relax．（常用的放松方式）【高分句型】
I think taking exercise is a proper way because it can rest our brains and eyes．【高分句型】Besides，it can keep us healthy．So，I often play ping-pong after class．It's really helpful to both my health and my study．（我認(rèn)為鍛煉是最適當(dāng)?shù)囊约霸�因�?/p>

點(diǎn)評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點(diǎn)．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．