Question

6．假設(shè)你是Li Hua，請(qǐng)你用英文給你校外教Jim發(fā)一封電子郵件，主要內(nèi)容包括：
1．今天下午，你上體育課時(shí)傷了左腳，明天不能去上他的課．
2．邀請(qǐng)他參加下周的英語(yǔ)俱樂(lè)部活動(dòng)．
時(shí)間：下周五下午4點(diǎn)
地點(diǎn)：初三一班
活動(dòng)內(nèi)容：用英文討論粉吸計(jì)劃，并希望他能給同學(xué)們一些如何提高英語(yǔ)的建議．
3．如果有問(wèn)題，可以打電話或發(fā)電子郵件聯(lián)系．
注意：
1．文中不得出現(xiàn)涉及考生真實(shí)信息的人名、地名或校名．
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫．
3．詞數(shù)70-110，開(kāi)頭、結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Jim，
I'm Li Hua，one of the students in your spoken English class．I'm sorry to tell you that I can't go to your class tomorrow．The reason why I ask for leave is that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon．
Besides，I'd like to invite you to join in the activity in our English club next Friday．It'll start at 4 p．m．in Class1，Grade 3．We'll talk about the plan for the coming summer vacation in English．And we'll be very glad if you can give us some advice on how to improve our English．Call me or send me an email if you have any questions．
I'm looking forward to your early reply．
Yours．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 此作文要求寫(xiě)一封信．通過(guò)閱讀材料可知這篇作文主要使用的人稱(chēng)就是第一人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，題中包含了這些要點(diǎn)：①今天下午，你上體育課時(shí)傷了左腳，明天不能去上他的課；②邀請(qǐng)他參加下周的英語(yǔ)俱樂(lè)部活動(dòng)；③如果有問(wèn)題，可以打電話或發(fā)電子郵件聯(lián)系．注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，句子要通順連貫，沒(méi)有語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤．
高分句型一：
The reason why I ask for leave is that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon我請(qǐng)假的原因是今天下午的體育課上傷了左腳．這是Why引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，先行詞是reason，后面的that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon是that引導(dǎo)的表語(yǔ)從句．
高分句型二：
And we'll be very glad if you can give us some advice on how to improve our English如果你能給我們一些關(guān)于如何提高我們的英語(yǔ)的建議，我們將非常高興．這是一個(gè)if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，主句用一般將來(lái)時(shí)，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．

解答 Dear Jim，
    I'm Li Hua，one of the students in your spoken English class．I'm sorry to tell you that I can't go to your class tomorrow．The reason why I ask for leave is that I hurt my left foot in the P．E．class this afternoon【高分句型一，注意定語(yǔ)從句的使用】．【要點(diǎn)一】
    Besides，I'd like to invite you to join in the activity in our English club next Friday．It'll start at 4 p．m．in Class1，Grade 3．We'll talk about the plan for the coming summer vacation in English．And we'll be very glad if you can give us some advice on how to improve our English．【高分句型二，if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句】【要點(diǎn)二】Call me or send me an email if you have any questions．【要點(diǎn)三】
    I'm looking forward to your early reply．
                                                                                 Yours，
                                                                                 Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇寫(xiě)作需注意要求中所提供的要點(diǎn)，不可遺漏．需在平時(shí)積累相關(guān)的詞匯，多閱讀此類(lèi)題材，將詞匯歸類(lèi)整理；動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫(xiě)出關(guān)鍵單詞．寫(xiě)作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系．上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞．如but，so，then等．