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7．近年來(lái)，北侖區(qū)委區(qū)政府本著"既要金山銀山，又要綠水青山"這一宗旨，加快城市生態(tài)環(huán)境建設(shè)，努力營(yíng)造天藍(lán)水清地綠鳥(niǎo)語(yǔ)花香的綠色北侖．作為青少年的我們，在保護(hù)環(huán)境和節(jié)約能源方面，我們應(yīng)該做些什么？不應(yīng)該做些什么？怎樣使我們的生活環(huán)境更適合居住？請(qǐng)你結(jié)合自己所看所想談?wù)勛约旱目捶�，字�(jǐn)?shù)80字左右．


Good environment is very important to everyone．It's our duty to protect the environment．
But now we find evironment problems aroud us are becoming more and more serious．For example，factories pour different kinds of polluted water into the rivers，trees on the hill are cut down，the air is not fresh any more，people drop litter everywhere．So，we students should try our best to make our city clean again．We are supposed to plant more trees and make them grow well．When we go shopping，we can use our own cloth bags instead of plastic bags．We must never waste water．we should turn off the taps as soon as we finish using water．We can volunteer our spare time to make more people know how important the environment is to us．If everyone concentrates more on the environment，Beilun will become more and more beautiful!．

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分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是談?wù)勗鯓邮刮覀兊纳�活環(huán)境更適合居�。畷r(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1自己看到的破壞環(huán)境的行為
2看法和建議．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
pour…into…把…倒入…
cut down 砍倒
try one's best to do sth 竭盡全力做某事
be supposed to 應(yīng)該
instead of 而不是
turn off 關(guān)掉
concentrate on關(guān)注
【高分句型】
1．①When we go shopping，we can use our own cloth bags②instead of plastic bags．
①when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句
②instead of 而不是

2．①If everyone②concentrates more on the environment，Beilun will become ③more and more beautiful!
①if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句．遵循主將從現(xiàn)的規(guī)則．
②concentrate on關(guān)注
③比較級(jí)+and+比較級(jí)  越來(lái)越…

解答 Good environment is very important to everyone．It's our duty to protect the environment
But now we find evironment problems aroud us are becoming more and more serious．For example，factories pour different kinds of  polluted water into the rivers，trees on the hill are cut down，the air is not fresh any more，people drop litter everywhere．（自己看到的破壞環(huán)境的行為）So，we students should try our best to make our city clean again．We are supposed to plant more trees and make them grow well．When we go shopping，we can use our own cloth bags instead of plastic bags．【高分句型】We must never waste water．we should turn off the taps as soon as we finish using water．We can volunteer our spare time to make more people know how important the environment is to us．If everyone concentrates more on the environment，Beilun will become more and more beautiful!【高分句型】（看法和建議）

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