Question

(2009年廣東省湛江二中高三畢業(yè)班2月月考 ，IV讀寫任務(wù))

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

The generation gap between students and their teachers is becoming more significant with only 3.3 percent out of a survey group of 1,000 students from 30 key middle schools in the city saying they would be willing to tell their teachers of their inner thoughts.

In today’s educational environment, teachers are positioned to be the authority figure for learning instead of becoming good friends in the life of students.

As only students with good marks in exams are considered the “apples in the eyes” of the teachers, most students think their teachers to be partial（偏心）.  

“I feel sad to hear such remarks,” said Yu Yi, a well-known special-class teacher.

She recalled that in the past, teachers and students would play basketball together or comment on novels while sitting on the grass during a break. But today, study and good marks are the only topics of conversation between students and teachers.

“Schools are not only the place where knowledge is imparted（傳授）, but also where students are taught how to be an upright person,” Yu said. “The success of a person is not merely determined by intelligence but also by emotional state.”

Yang Xiong, director of the Juvenile Research Institute, said the educational system which focuses on examinations should be held to be substantially responsible.

寫作內(nèi)容

1.  以約30個詞概括學(xué)生不愿告訴老師內(nèi)心想法的原因；

2.  以約120個詞就“現(xiàn)代師生關(guān)系”這個主題發(fā)表你的看法，包括如下要點(diǎn)：

（1）你是否愿意告訴老師你內(nèi)心的想法，為什么？

（2）你希望你與你的老師之間的關(guān)系是怎樣的？如何才能建立這種關(guān)系？

【寫作要求】

1. 可以使用實(shí)例或其他論述方法支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2. 標(biāo)題自定；

3. 文中不能出現(xiàn)考生的真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】   概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫

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Answer 1

Love and Concern Make an Ideal Relationship

Students are becoming unwilling to confess to their teachers because they are not equal in position and teachers lay too much emphasis on the academic performances of the students.

While some students might have doubts, I am willing to share my inner thoughts with my teachers. They show love and concern for their students and are good listeners. I always find it easy to seek support and advice from them, from which I benefit and learn a lot.

In this case, an ideal relationship between teachers and students is very important. In my opinion, this relationship should be one filled with love, care and understanding, in which teachers and students show respect for each other and exchange ideas freely. To build a relationship of this kind , teachers should become friends of students while students ought to place more trust in their teachers and give voice to their feelings frankly. Only by joint efforts can we enjoy a warm relationship between teachers and students.

解析:

本篇書面表達(dá)非常貼近學(xué)生實(shí)際的學(xué)習(xí)生活，讓學(xué)生感覺到有話可說，而且樂于表達(dá)。

其寫作要點(diǎn)注意以下幾個方面：

1. 第一部分寫作，可以通過閱讀文中事例總結(jié)概括出原因來。但要注意詞數(shù)限制和總結(jié)到位程度。

2．第二部分寫作真正表達(dá)出自己所想所思的內(nèi)容，注意四個關(guān)鍵要點(diǎn)：

A.“自己是否愿意”

B．“為什么”  

C．“希望什么樣的關(guān)系”

D．“如何建立”

所以要在感覺非常愿意說的基礎(chǔ)上準(zhǔn)確把握要點(diǎn)范圍，既要說還不能說的過多過廣。