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【題目】Tchaikovsky, a famous Russian composer of the late-Romantic period, was born on 7 May 1840 in the mountains of western Russia. He was the first Russian composer whose music made a lasting impression internationally. Tchaikovsky’s training set him on a path to combine what he had learned with the native musical practices to which he had been exposed from childhood. He first helped write a song in 1844, at an age when most children are still in kindergarten. At home, his mother sang folk songs, which helped develop his interest in music. Mozart was Tchaikovsky’s favourite composer and he influenced Tchaikovsky’s life and work. For 11 years, beginning in 1866, Tchaikovsky taught at the Moscow School of Music. During his time there, he wrote music for the piano, along with ballets, operas and symphonies. He was famous for writing the music for the ballet Swan Lake in 1876. Because of his musical talent, Tchaikovsky toured many countries as a conductor, including a voyage to the USA in 1891. He continued to write for the ballet until his death in Saint Petersburg in 1893.

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1.寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中不能直接引用原文語(yǔ)句；

2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

3.不必寫(xiě)標(biāo)題。

[評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，語(yǔ)篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

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Answer 1

【答案】Tchaikovsky’s talent in music is just the first step to success. His mother, idol, hard work also play an important part in the process of his success. He is even committed to music until death.

After reading through Tchaikovsky’s life story, we can learn upwards of two lessons as follows. First, one should set a big goal and spare no effort in achieving it. Tchaikovsky’s life-long goal was to catch up with his idol Mozart, who influenced his life and work. Second, one should commit one’s whole being to work. Tchaikovsky wrote music for ten years and finally created his masterpiece, Swan Lake.

When it comes to commitment to work, I shall count it as a personal favour. I was once poor in math, but I swore to get it improved in my senior year, so I devoted myself to math in classroom, library and anywhere possible and made it eventually. (151 words)

【解析】這篇作文需要考生通過(guò)所給短文概括出柴可夫斯基的故事，并從中總結(jié)出他成功的原因和這些因素對(duì)考生本人的啟示。

考生在寫(xiě)這篇文章時(shí)，要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：

1.考生需要正確讀懂文意，精準(zhǔn)概括，不要大面積或整句摘抄原文內(nèi)容，學(xué)會(huì)用自己的語(yǔ)言總結(jié)。

2.考生需從故事中提煉出人物成功的因素，并聯(lián)系自己的學(xué)習(xí)與生活，談?wù)勅绾螒?yīng)用這些成功的因素。

3.考生應(yīng)學(xué)會(huì)使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，使上下文行文流暢，銜接自然流暢。

4.注意題干的字?jǐn)?shù)要求。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

1.the first step to success成功的第一步 考生多用這樣的名詞性短語(yǔ)可提高作文的檔次；

2.Idol偶像；

3.play an important part in在……中起重要作用；

4.Be committed to決心做……；

5.First、second等詞會(huì)使文章結(jié)構(gòu)變得清晰有條理，是寫(xiě)作常用的格式，類似的短語(yǔ)還有：for the first time、what’s more、then、further more、besides、at last but not least;

6.When it comes to當(dāng)提到，就……而論；

7.Swear發(fā)誓；

8.senior year高三、大四、畢業(yè)季；

9.Devote to獻(xiàn)身于。