Question

【題目】John was traveling by ship to Europe when a terrible storm came. A great leak was filling the ship with water. No matter how hard the sailors and passengers worked at the pumps, the water was still rising. The ship was sinking fast. There seemed to be no hope. But the captain told them not to give up hope. He said that there was hope so long as the ship remained above water. He promised that if they didn’t give up hope, he would land them safely. The captain’s powerful will moved them all. In the end he did land them safely.

After they landed, John found the captain to show his appreciation. But to his surprise, the captain said to him that he was the boy of 30 years ago who bought a geography book in his bookstore. John suddenly thought of the boy. At that time the boy didn’t have enough money, but he had gone from shop to shop and believed he could get what he wanted. Finally, he made it. Now, it was the same willpower of him that saved the lives of all the passengers.

【寫作內容】

在一次課外閱讀中，你讀上面的故事，決定寫篇文章針對“毅力與成功”發(fā)表自己的看法。內容要點包括：

1．以約30個詞概括故事的內容要點；

2．然后以約120個詞就“毅力與成功”這個主題發(fā)表你的看法，內容包括：

（1）敘述你或你的同學憑借毅力取得成功的事例；

（2）你認為取得成功，主要是靠毅力還是智力？

【寫作要求】

1．你可以使用實例或者其他論證方法支持你的觀點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但是不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2．文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。

【評分標準】

概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內容合適，篇章連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】In the story, a captain always insisted on doing something, even when he was a little boy. In one voyage, it was just his willpower that made him save all the passengers’ lives.

The story reminds me of my classmate, Linda. In study, she lagged far behind us, but she did not give up. Instead, she kept a notebook in her pocket, and took it out to read on the bus, at the school gate and in the queue before the dining hall.

Unluckily, her English did not improve much. She took up this challenge and worked even harder. Besides, she kept turning to the teacher for help. Finally she made great progress.

Many elements contribute to success, of which the most important is willpower. A man of strong will never give up before any difficulty, nor does he lose heart whatever happens. So I think willpower is more important than intelligence on the road to success.

【解析】試題分析：根據所給內容，以約30個詞概括故事的內容要點，然后針對“毅力與成功”發(fā)表自己的看法。認真閱讀前面的提示，認清寫作要求和提綱之間的關系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態(tài)。根據所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來。寫作時注意時態(tài)、語態(tài)的合理運用，主次分明，詳略得當，語言力求準確、簡潔。根據情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

【亮點說明】

本文符合題目要求，結構布局合理，語言精練，同時使用高級句子。In the story, a captain always insisted on doing something, even when he was a little boy.句中使用when引導的時間狀語從句；In one voyage, it was just his willpower that made him save all the passengers’ lives.

句中使用強調句型；Many elements contribute to success, of which the most important is willpower.句中使用非限制性定語從句；A man of strong will never give up before any difficulty, nor does he lose heart whatever happens.部分倒裝和讓步狀語從句；另外，insisted on doing，Instead, Unluckily, Besides的使用為文章增色添彩。