Question

3．假如你是某中學學生李華，給某英語報紙Lyric Lessons（邊唱邊學）欄目寫一封e-mail，為你的同學、朋友、老師、或父母點一首英文歌（根據(jù)所提供的兩首歌曲任選一首）．內(nèi)容包括：1．為誰點歌；2．選擇歌曲；3．陳述理由．
要求：1．字數(shù)100字左右；2．不得照抄歌詞．
Dear Editor，
Dear Editor：
I'm Li Hua，I want to choose the English song called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．
When I was in trouble，only my mother accompany me without hesitation．I still remember when I failed in the exam．I'm so upset that I can't do homework with tears．I waiting and feeling fear in the corner，my mother come and encouraged me with warm．words．She told me to strengthen myself and raised me up from the deep sea．I fear to imagine if my mother didn't help me in need，how helpless will I feel．
So，I'd like to play the song called"You raise me up"for my mother．
Yours Sincerely
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一封電子郵件，在英語報紙Lyric Lessons（邊唱邊學）欄目為你的同學、朋友、老師或父母點一首英文歌．寫作要點包括：1．為誰點歌； 2．選擇歌曲；3．陳述理由．寫作時人稱以第一人稱和第三人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時為主．重要短語：be in trouble（處于麻煩中），accompanysb （陪伴某人），without hesitation （毫不猶豫），fail inthe exam （考試不及格），encourage sb （鼓勵某人），be in need （處在需要中），feel helpless（感覺無助），would liketo do （想要做某事）．
【高分句型】
1．I want to choose the English song called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．
這里是過去分詞短語作后置定語，被修飾的名詞是the English song，called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift作后置定語，可理解為定語從句which/that is called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．
2．I waiting and feeling fear in the corner，my mother come and encouraged me with warm words．
這里是獨立主格結(jié)構，主句是my mother come and encouraged me with warm．words，I waiting and feeling fear in the corner為獨立主格結(jié)構，由"主格詞+現(xiàn)在分詞"構成．

解答 Dear Editor：
      I'm Li Hua，I want to choose the Englishsong called‘You raise me up'for my mother as her birthday gift．【高分句型】（為誰點歌）
      When I was in trouble，only my motheraccompany me without hesitation．I still remember when I failed in the exam．I'mso upset that I can't do homework with tears．I waiting and feeling fear in thecorner，my mother come and encouraged me with warm．words．【高分句型】She told me tostrengthen myself and raised me up from the deep sea．I fear to imagine if mymother didn't help me in need，how helpless will I feel．（選擇歌曲）
So，I'd like to play the song called"Youraise me up"for my mother．（陳述理由）

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．