Question

【題目】如今，我們身邊不乏“低頭族”。他們?cè)谂c朋友聚會(huì)、家人團(tuán)聚或乘坐交通工具時(shí)，常常低頭忙于瀏覽手機(jī)。請(qǐng)簡(jiǎn)要描述此現(xiàn)象，并發(fā)表你的看法。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

提示詞：低頭族 phubbing

The phenomenon that people are always phubbing is becoming more and more popular.

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Answer 1

【答案】The phenomenon that people are always phubbing is becoming more and more popular. Some people only stare at the screens of their phones, ignoring the people around them no matter when they take a bus, hold a party or even get together with their families. Worse still, they will not miss the chance of surfing the Internet or playing the games when they cross the road, which is likely to cause serious accidents and threaten their lives.

It is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up. Do cherish the ones around us and appreciate the splendid scenery ahead of us.

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于話題類。

第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，本篇為話題類作文。如今，我們身邊不乏“低頭族”。他們?cè)谂c朋友聚會(huì)、家人團(tuán)聚或乘坐交通工具時(shí)，常常低頭忙于瀏覽手機(jī)。請(qǐng)簡(jiǎn)要描述此現(xiàn)象，并發(fā)表你的看法。時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），如：stare at凝視，take a bus乘公車， hold a party舉行宴會(huì)，worse still更糟糕的是，threaten威脅，throw away扔掉，cherish珍惜。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問題。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

亮點(diǎn)說明：作者在范文中使用了較多高級(jí)表達(dá)方式，如：Worse still, they will not miss the chance of surfing the Internet or playing the games when they cross the road, which is likely to cause serious accidents and threaten their lives.定語從句的運(yùn)用；It is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up.常用句型的運(yùn)用。本文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。另外全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。