Question

閱讀下面材料，然后按要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

On the morning after the rainstorm, a man was walking on the beach, enjoying the beautiful view of the nature. Suddenly, he found thousands of starfish(海星) trapped in the shallow puddles(水坑) on the beach. As the sun rose, the water in the puddles was disappearing and the starfish began to struggle for life desperately. However, they still had no hopes to go back to the sea not far away.

As the man continued walking, he noticed a little boy picking up the starfish one by one and throwing them into the ocean. Then he went over and asked the boy, “What are you doing?” The boy replied, “I'm throwing starfish back into the water. If I leave them here, they’ll dry up and die.” The man said, “But look how many starfish there are. What you’re doing can’t possibly make a great difference to all of them.” As the boy picked up another starfish and threw it into the ocean, he said, “Well, it makes a difference to this one!” Then he added, “Though I can’t save all of them, I can make some of them survive with my efforts.”

Moved by the lovely and warm-hearted boy, the man bent down to pick up the struggling starfish and threw them into water. Every time he threw the starfish into the water, he felt their fate was changing.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1、以約30個(gè)詞概括短文的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。

2、然后以約120個(gè)詞就 “施助于人”的主題發(fā)表看法，內(nèi)容包括：

（1）你如何評(píng)價(jià)故事中小男孩？

（2）敘述一次你真實(shí)或虛構(gòu)的“施助于人”的經(jīng)歷。

（3）呼吁大家積極參與“施助于人”的活動(dòng)。

【寫作要求】

1、作文中可以使用實(shí)例來支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容論述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2、作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

A man noticed a boy repeatedly picking up the trapped starfish and throwing them into the sea despite being unable to save all of them. Consequently, the man was moved and joined the boy to save the struggling starfish.

Reading the impressive story, I find the boy was so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise from all the people. Young as he was, he fulfilled what was incredible to people. Actually, the young boy set a good example, especially to the young.

My meaningful experience of offering help to a schoolmate will never escape from my memory. When I was in Senior Two, one of my schoolmates suffered from a severe and rare disease, which cost his parents all their savings and even put them heavily into debt. For lack of money, he was unable to get further medical treatment. Knowing this, I together with my classmates called for all the students and friends to collect money for him. It was our timely efforts that helped him out of hardships. Eventually he was saved.

As the saying goes, “A small act of kindness goes a long way.” Therefore, I appeal to all the people to get involved in the campaign of offering a hand to others. I think only when we offer assistance to each other voluntarily can we live in a harmonious society.

【解析】

試題分析：首先要對(duì)材料進(jìn)行簡潔的概括；其次是以“施助于人”為話題寫一篇作文。作文第一部分評(píng)價(jià)故事中的小男孩；第二部分?jǐn)⑹鲆淮巍笆┲�于人”的�?jīng)歷；第三部分呼吁大家積極參與到“施助于人”中來。使用第一人稱進(jìn)行寫作，不要出現(xiàn)拼寫和時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤。

亮點(diǎn)說明：范文使用了較多的重要語法知識(shí)：非謂語動(dòng)詞Reading the impressive story和Knowing this；結(jié)果狀語從句so kind-hearted that he should really deserve praise...；讓步狀語從句Young as he was；賓語從句what was incredible to people；時(shí)間狀語從句When I was in Senior Two；定語從句which cost his parents all their savings和As the saying goes；強(qiáng)調(diào)句型It was our timely efforts that helped him out of hardships.；倒裝句式only when we offer assistance to each other voluntarily can we live in a harmonious society等，定語從句、讓步狀語從句、非謂語動(dòng)詞、強(qiáng)調(diào)句和倒裝句等的使用，使作文的等級(jí)得到了提高，顯示了較高的英語水平；

范文注意使用Actually, Therefore等銜接上下文，做到了語意連貫；

范文使用了較多的短語：set a good example to；offering help to；escape from；one of my schoolmates；suffered from；For lack of money；together with；called for；appeal to；get involved in等，使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)，有說服力。

考點(diǎn)：話題作文