Question

生活中沖突時有發(fā)生。假設你班同學蘇華和李江打籃球時發(fā)生爭執(zhí),導致關系緊張。請你結合此事,并根據以下提示,用英語寫一篇短文, 向學校英文報“Happy Teens”專欄投稿。

簡要描述事情的經過	打籃球、碰撞、爭執(zhí),等等
分析發(fā)生沖突的原因	1. 遇事不夠冷靜
	2. ……
談談避免沖突的做法	(請考生根據自己的經歷或感想,提出至少兩種做法)

注意:
1.對所有要點逐一陳述,適當發(fā)揮,不要簡單翻譯。
2.詞數120 左右。開頭已經寫好,不計入總詞數。
3.作文中不得提及有關考生個人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等。
Conflicts with others are common in everyday life.

Answer 1

Conflicts with others are common in everyday life. During the basketball game yesterday afternoon, Su Hua and Li Jiang bumped into each other, trying to catch the ball. Then they started shouting and yelling, and it turned into a horrible quarrel.
To be honest, it was Su’s fault but Li was also to blame—they were not calm enough and both said some really mean things. They cared too much about winning and losing. As a matter of fact, blocking, pushing and bumping are just part of a tough game.
To avoid such conflicts, we should be kind to one another, which is essential to enjoying a harmonious life. It is also a virtue to forgive and forget, especially in such a competitive and stressful society. Instead of blaming each other, we should communicate more and put ourselves in others’place.
Don’t be self-centered and try to be considerate. We must learn to handle conflicts calmly and wisely.

試題分析：本題為提綱類作文,要求學生介紹事情經過、沖突原因以及避免沖突的做法。話題貼近時代，貼近生活，貼近學生，提示內容少，發(fā)揮空間大，考生有話可寫，體現(xiàn)了新課標背景下的命題方向。在寫作中,學生首先應該注意時態(tài)的變化。在敘述事情的經過以及沖突原因時應該使用過去時,在談及避免沖突的做法時應該使用一般現(xiàn)在時。學生還應注意段落清晰,行文流暢。根據要點提示,作文最好分為三段,第一段介紹事情經過,第二段分析沖突原因,第三段談論避免沖突的做法,提出建議。
【亮點說明】范文思路清晰，結構合理，內容涵蓋了表格內的所有要點，有適當發(fā)揮，主題得到了升華。此外，文章句式多樣，有狀語從句（不定式/分詞做狀語）Su Hua and Li Jiang bumped into each other, trying to catch the ball.、主語從句（it做形式主語）It is also a virtue to forgive and forget, especially in such a competitive and stressful society.、祈使句Don’t be self-centered and try to be considerate.等；銜接詞的選用增強了文章的連貫與流暢度，如：“Then” , “As a matter of fact”，“ especially”等。