Question

11．假如你是某校高中生李華，暑期應(yīng)邀到加拿大參加國際學(xué)生聯(lián)誼活動，現(xiàn)已回國．請你給在國外的教師Mr．Smith 寫一封信．內(nèi)容主要包括：
1．表達(dá)感激之情；
2．難忘的印象：人格魅力（嚴(yán)格，關(guān)愛）；授課方式（幽默，生動，寓教于樂）；
3．感受：開闊視野，增進友誼，收獲很大．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
     2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
     3．開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)為你寫好．
Dear Smith，
How time flies!It's about three weeks since I returned home．
                                       
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是應(yīng)用文中的書信，表達(dá)對別人的感謝，要點基本給出，同學(xué)們在寫作時，不要遺漏要點，注意使用高級詞匯，高級句型．使文章更地道流暢．  
【亮點說明】范文中出現(xiàn)一些常見的短語：express my hearty thanks for；treasure this chance；broadened my view of the world
I treasure this chance because I learned a great deal in New Zealand，which has broadened my view of the world．（高分句型） 帶有which 引導(dǎo)的定語從句
What impressed me most is the lecture you gave us．（高分句型）帶有what引導(dǎo)的主語從句

解答 Dear Smith，
How time flies!It's about two weeks since I returned home．I'm writing to you to express my hearty thanks for your caring during my stay in New Zealand．I'll never forget the happy days we spent together．（高分句型）What impressed me most is the lecture you gave us．（高分句型）In class you were always strict but out of class you were so kind．Your humorous way made the classes lively and interesting，combining learning with fun．
I treasure this chance because I learned a great deal in New Zealand，which has broadened my view of the world．（高分句型）What's more，I feel my spoken English improved a lot．I think it's also a good way to develop the friendship between us．
Best，
Li Hua

點評 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點．設(shè)計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．