Question

5．假定你是李華．最近你所居住的城市的霧霾嚴(yán)重影響了人們的生活．請根據(jù)寫作要點給報社寫一篇稿件反映這一問題．
寫作要點：
1．霧霾（smog）帶來的危害； 2．你的建議．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．行文連貫，語篇完整；
3．文中不得透露個人真實信息．

Answer 1

分析 本題考查霧霾危害和建議的話題，根據(jù)材料中提供的要點信息闡述．學(xué)生可聯(lián)系生活常識適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，合情合理即可．圍繞霧霾危害和建議進(jìn)行論述．主要人稱為第三人稱，基本時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．
首先是危害，第二段是建議和展望．同學(xué)們基本上只要按照題目給出的要點進(jìn)行發(fā)揮即可．一方面，要注意文章的結(jié)構(gòu)，如as we all know，in the first place，to solve the problem，F(xiàn)irstly，Also，What's more，Last but not least等可以讓文章成為一個整體，更為流暢．另一方面，還要注意交際的得體性，如文章可使用when it comes to，not only…but also…，I'd like to等使句式多樣、語氣較為婉轉(zhuǎn)．
參考詞匯和短語：as we all know，F(xiàn)irstly，Also，What's more，Last but not least等可以讓文章成為一個整體，更為流暢．when it comes to，not only…but also…，I'd like to使句式多樣、語氣較為婉轉(zhuǎn)．

解答 As we all know，smog has always been a serious problem in our city，which has done great harm to our daily life．（高分句型一）Recently it has become more and more serious．The heavy smog has caused many traffic accidents，which has brought great sadness to the families．（高分句型二）In the street，you can see many people wear masks．But unluckily，many old people and babies can't escape suffering from illness caused by smog．（霧霾的危害）
   Therefore，it is very urgent for us to take measures to reduce the smog．It is very vital to educate people，especially factory owners to raise awareness of protecting the environment．（高分句型三）Moreover，people should go to work by bus or bike instead of driving every day．And media should call on citizens to work together to do something to save the air that we can't live without．（提出建議）

點評 提綱類寫作的文章較開放式的文體，比較好寫．學(xué)生在寫作的過程中，首先思路要清晰，要對所表達(dá)的句子通順的說出來，遇到不會的要學(xué)會替換所用語，來達(dá)到同樣的意思．在每一篇作文中，對于表達(dá)觀點的句子，都要用上起承轉(zhuǎn)合的連詞來加強文章的層次感，適當(dāng)運用俗語，運用平時常用的句式來使文章富有變化，表達(dá)地道得體．