Question

上月，我們公司以35歲以下的人群作為調查對象, 選取了1000人進行了關于“網上購物”的一項調查, 調查情況如下：

你是否愿意在網上購物？
結果	64%愿意	36%不愿意
原因	1.方便, 在家可買到所需物品 2.網上商品比較便宜, 而且可選擇的品牌多	1.害怕買到贗品 2.擔心被騙錢
結論	只要防范網上購物的弊端, 將有越來越多的人選擇 網上購物。

 
[寫作內容]
根據以上數(shù)據，寫一篇調查報告, 內容包括：
1. 調查時間、調查問題以及調查對象;
2. 愿意網上購物的人占調查人數(shù)的百分比；
3.人們愿意在網上購物的主要原因；
4. 人們不愿意在網上購物的主要原因；
5. 本次調查的結論。

Answer 1

Last month, our company carried out a survey about shopping on line among 1000 interviewees younger than 35 years old. 64% of those interviewed are willing to shop on line, mainly because they think the Internet makes it convenient for them to buy what they need although they are staying at home. Besides, they believe that goods on line are cheaper, with a variety of brands to choose from. The rest of the interviewees don’t want to shop on line, claiming that goods on sale on the Internet might be fake and that they are worried about being cheated out of money. In conclusion, only by guarding against the disadvantages of on-line shopping will more and more people choose the shop on line.

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【亮點說明】64% of those interviewed are willing to shop on line, mainly because they think the Internet makes it convenient for them to buy what they need although they are staying at home. 這句話有原因狀語從句和讓步狀語從句，還有過去分詞做定語，也有it做形式賓語， they believe that goods on line are cheaper, with a variety of brands to choose from. 這句話用了with復合結構，The rest of the interviewees don’t want to shop on line, claiming that goods on sale on the Internet might be fake and that they are worried about being cheated out of money. 這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨狀語， only by guarding against the disadvantages of on-line shopping will more and more people choose the shop on line. 這句話用了倒裝句，還有文章還使用Besides, In conclusion,這些詞使文章更加連貫。