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4．假定你是李華．請根據(jù)寫作要點用英語寫一篇周記，記述你周末幫助家人做家務(wù)的一次經(jīng)歷．
寫作要點：（1）做家務(wù)的理由；（2）做家務(wù)的過程；（3）你的感受．
注意：
（1）短文詞數(shù)不少于100；
（2）開頭部分已寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)；
（3）不能使用真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
I am an 18-year-old middle school student，I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework．Feeling quite sorry for that，I begin to think about what to do to help．
Last Sunday，when my parents went out shopping，I suddenly got an idea：why not give the rooms a thorough cleaning？Firstly I collected all the books，newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place．Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture．After that，I swept and mopped the floors．
At this very moment，my parents came back and were quite surprised to see all the rooms tidy and floors shinning．My mother gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes．Tired as I was，I never felt so happy．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一篇周記，記述周末幫助家人做家務(wù)的一次經(jīng)歷．
寫作時人稱以第一和第三人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時為主．
寫作要點：1．做家務(wù)的理由； 2．做家務(wù)的過程；3．你的感受．
重要短語：be busy with（收到…來信），help sb with sth（幫助某人做某事），be sorry for（對…感到抱歉），think about（考慮…），go out shopping（外出購物），get an idea（想出了一個主意），why not（為什么不…），a thorough cleaning（一個徹底的清掃），put sth in place（把某物放在恰當(dāng)?shù)奈恢茫�，wiped sth off（擦去某物），mop the floors（拖到），be surprised to do （驚奇地做某事），give sb a hug（擁抱某人）．
【高分句型一】
1．Feeling quite sorry for that，I begin to think about what to do to help．
此處是由現(xiàn)在分詞短語作原因狀語，主句為"I begin to think about what to do to help"，主句的主語為"I"與所給動詞"feel"構(gòu)成邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．
【高分句型二】
2．Firstly I collected all the books，newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place．
此處是由過去分詞"scattered+介詞短語"作后置定語，可以理解為定語從句"which/that were scattered in the rooms"．
【高分句型三】
3．Tired as I was，I never felt so happy．
此處是由"as"作"盡管"用時構(gòu)成的部分倒裝句型，結(jié)構(gòu)為"形容詞+as+主語+謂語"，主句為"I never felt so happy"．

解答 I am an 18-year-old middle school student．I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework．Feeling quite sorry for that，I begin to think about what to do to help．【高分句型一】（做家務(wù)的理由）
Last Sunday，when my parents went out shopping，I suddenly got an idea：why not give the rooms a thorough cleaning？Firstly I collected all the books，newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place．【高分句型二】Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture．After that，I swept and mopped the floors．（做家務(wù)的過程）
At this very moment，my parents came back and were quite surprised to see all the rooms tidy and floors shinning．My mother gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes．Tired as I was，I never felt so happy．【高分句型三】（你的感受）

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．