Question

14．假如你是高三（1）班的李華，你校網(wǎng)站刊登了一則"走進(jìn)英國(guó)家庭"活動(dòng)的通知．你想?yún)⒓釉摶顒?dòng)，請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)給該活動(dòng)負(fù)責(zé)人Mr Park發(fā)一封電子郵件申請(qǐng)參加．
內(nèi)容主要包括：
1．你參加該活動(dòng)的目的；
2．你的興趣、特長(zhǎng)；
3．你希望走進(jìn)什么樣的英國(guó)家庭．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
3．郵件開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）．
Dear Mr Park，
I am Li Hua，a student from Class 1，Senior 3．I am longing to join in this activity becauseLooking forward to your early reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫(xiě)一封郵件，申請(qǐng)參加校"走進(jìn)英國(guó)家庭"．的活動(dòng)．寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)包括：1．參加活動(dòng)的目的； 2．興趣、特長(zhǎng)；3．希望走進(jìn)什么樣的英國(guó)家庭．
寫(xiě)作時(shí)時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，人稱(chēng)以第一和第三人稱(chēng)為主．
重要短語(yǔ)：longto to do （渴望做某事），join in （參加），learn sth about…（學(xué)習(xí)關(guān)于…），surf the Internet（上網(wǎng)），on weekends （在周末），be good at doing （擅長(zhǎng)…），listen to music （聽(tīng)音樂(lè)），be lucky enough to do （足夠幸運(yùn)去做某事），be friendly to do （對(duì)…友好），be willing to（愿意做某事），get along well with （與…相處融洽），achieve my dream （實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想），look forward to （期望…）．
【高分句型】
1．②If I am lucky enough to have the chance，I hope to live in a family ①that are friendly to me and are willing to take me to visit around often．
 ①這里是由that引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，that在從句中作主語(yǔ)，先行詞為family．
 ②這里是由if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，主句為I hope to live in a family that are friendly to me and are willing to take me to visit around often．

2．I would appreciate it if you could help me achieve my dream．
這里是it作形式賓語(yǔ)，真正的賓語(yǔ)為if you could help me achieve my dream．常用的結(jié)構(gòu)為"I appreciate/love/like/hate/dislike等動(dòng)詞+it+if/when引導(dǎo)的句子"．

解答 Dear Mr Park．
    I am Li Hua，a student from Class 1，Senior 3．I am longing to join in this activity because I think it a good opportunity for me to improve my English and I can also learn more about British history and culture．（參加活動(dòng)的目的）
    I have many hobbies，for example，I like surfing the Internet and doing sports．My favorite sport is basketball and I often play it on weekends．Besides．I am good at drawing and I like listening to music．（興趣、特長(zhǎng)）
    If I am lucky enough to have the chance，I hope to live in a family that are friendly to me and are willing to take me to visit around often．【高分句型】I am sure I can get along well with my host family．I would appreciate it if you could help me achieve my dream．【高分句型】（希望走進(jìn)什么樣的英國(guó)家庭）
     Looking forward to your early reply．
 Yours sincerely，
 Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語(yǔ)和重要句型．