Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。

Without pain and struggle, life is never complete and successful, just as without amounts of suffering and struggle in cocoon(繭)，a butter can never fly.

注意：1．無(wú)須寫(xiě)標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)。     2．除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限。

3．內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例。       4．詞數(shù)為120左右。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Writing：One possible version

  The road of life is never straight and smooth. It is our attitude towards the pain and difficulties that determines how far we can go.

  Playing the violin was once my dream, but for lack of practice and playing skills. I did very badly in the beginning, so I was often teased by other students. Gradually, I lost confidence in myself and I wanted to give up the violin. But my teacher told me: “Nothing is easy. Pain and struggle are the vital parts of our life.” Hearing that, I pushed myself harder to practise it. Little by little, I made progress. Eventually I won the first place in a violin competition. For the first time, I tasted the flavor of success after my struggle.

   From my experience I’ve learnt the lesson that it is pain and struggle that lead us to success. Whatever difficulties we are faced with, as long as we don’t give up and learn from our mistakes, we are sure to succeed.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇給出簡(jiǎn)單漢語(yǔ)提示的議論文類(lèi)書(shū)面表達(dá)。本文近似于命題作文。文章給出的漢語(yǔ)提示，只是定出了文章的主要論調(diào)。要想寫(xiě)好這類(lèi)作文，考生必須充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，打開(kāi)文章的思路，使其有血有肉。文章成文時(shí)應(yīng)注意：1.三段成文法。（1）第一段引出文章的主題；（2）用生活中的實(shí)例闡明主題觀點(diǎn)；（3）總結(jié)全文，得出結(jié)論。2.人稱(chēng)：第一人稱(chēng)；3.時(shí)態(tài)：敘述過(guò)去的實(shí)例用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，論述自己的觀點(diǎn)用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。4.適當(dāng)使用一些連詞和插入語(yǔ)，使文章自然、流暢，渾然一體；5.恰當(dāng)使用高級(jí)詞匯、短語(yǔ)和句型，以通過(guò)文章的檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文亮點(diǎn)1.使用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句型：It is our attitude towards the pain and difficulties that determines how far we can go. Whatever difficulties we are faced with, as long as we don’t give up and learn from our mistakes, we are sure to succeed.2.使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)：Hearing that, I pushed myself harder to practise it.3.短語(yǔ)：for lack of；give up；little by little；be faced with; be sure to do.

考點(diǎn)：考查議論文的寫(xiě)作。