Question

3．假定你是Jane，你的筆友李華最近因?yàn)榭荚嚸芗�、學(xué)業(yè)繁重，身體感到不適，嚴(yán)重影響了學(xué)習(xí)．因此，他發(fā)e-mail給你，尋求你的建議和幫助．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示予以回復(fù)．
寫作要點(diǎn)：1．合理的飲食； 2．適度的鍛煉；3…
注意：1．詞數(shù)80左右
 2．開頭和結(jié)尾部分已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
 3．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Li Hua，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．
                                                                                       
Best wishes!
                                                             Jane．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，寫一封書信，給筆友李華提一些學(xué)習(xí)生活上的建議．寫作要點(diǎn)包括：1．合理的飲食； 2．適度的鍛煉；3…．寫作時(shí)人稱以第一和第三人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．
重要短語(yǔ)：stay healthy （保持健康）；neglect（忽視）；a balanced diet（平衡的飲食）；take morning exercise （晨練）；stay up （熬夜）；
高分句型：1．First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．
                  運(yùn)用祈使句給對(duì)方提出建議，強(qiáng)調(diào)平衡飲食的重要性．
                  2．You can do some sports ①to refresh yourself②if weather permits．
                  ①不定式短語(yǔ)表示目的，說(shuō)明為什么要進(jìn)行體育鍛煉；②if引導(dǎo)一個(gè)條件狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Dear Jane，
    I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．（高分句型一）Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．As you know，daily exercise helps build a strong body．You can do some sports to refresh yourself if weather permits．（高分句型二）Finally，don't stay up to make sure you have a good sleep every night．
    I think it would be beneficial if you could follow my suggestions．Hope you'll feel well soon．
Best wishes．
                                                                  Jane

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫作時(shí)要注意：要點(diǎn)的提煉要全；關(guān)鍵短語(yǔ)和句型要寫對(duì)，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，還要注意人稱和時(shí)態(tài)使用要正確．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．