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14．假設(shè)你是劉海，你的加拿大朋友Kate來信詢問你的學(xué)習(xí)情況，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提供的信息，寫一封100字左右的回信，談?wù)勛詮哪氵M(jìn)入高一年級(jí)以來，嘗試新的學(xué)習(xí)方法，你的學(xué)習(xí)情況的變化．信的格式已提供給你．
過去：被動(dòng)學(xué)習(xí)，課堂上忙于做筆記，課余做作業(yè)，無時(shí)間消化．
現(xiàn)在：自主學(xué)習(xí)，小組討論，課外活動(dòng)多，成績優(yōu)異．
Dear Kate，
       ．
Yours，
Liu Hai．

Answer 1

分析 本文是提綱類作文，要求寫信給Peter，介紹自從你校實(shí)行新課改以來，嘗試新的學(xué)習(xí)方法，你們學(xué)習(xí)情況的變化，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點(diǎn)解釋清楚，不能有遺漏．在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次．同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second，Besides，What's more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢．本篇文章在寫作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡潔的表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文語言簡潔，使用常用的短語：To our delight，使我們高興的是，late into the night．到深夜，in pairs 成對(duì)的，go in for參加，還有范文充分體現(xiàn)高中教材中的重點(diǎn)語法和句式：There are many things going on in our school．這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做定語，In the past，our teachers stood in front of the class talking all the time while we students listened，busily taking notes．這句話用了while表示對(duì)比，和現(xiàn)在分詞，After a tiring day at school，we always had a lot of homework to do．這句話用了不定式．

解答 Dear Peter，
I'm glad to hear from you again．There are many things going on in our school．To our delight，things have got much better since we started a different way of learning．
（高分句型）In the past，our teachers stood in front of the class talking all the time while we students listened，busily taking notes．（高分句型）After a tiring day at school，we always had a lot of homework to do．Sometimes we even worked late into the night．Now we are active in class．We often have discussions in pairs or in groups．After class，we enjoy all kinds of activities，such as going in for sports，doing experiments，or surfing the Internet．（高分句型）
We are extremely happy about the changes in our studies．
All the best
Yours Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．