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18．親愛的同學(xué)，隨著你走出本次中考的考場，初中的學(xué)習(xí)生活就結(jié)束了．迎接你的將是近兩個月的輕松假期．你想好要在假期中做什么了嗎？跟我們分享你的假期計劃吧！請以"My summer vacation"為題，用英文寫一篇短文．
要點提示：
1．和父母去海南（Hainan）旅游；
2．看電視、聽音樂（listen to）；
3．看書、做些家務(wù)（housework）；
4．參考（take part in）一些有意義的活動（meaningful activities），比如和同學(xué)去養(yǎng)老院（the Old People's Home）看望老人，去農(nóng)村（the countryside）看望留守兒童（the left-behind children）等；
5．你的假期將是豐富多彩的（be colorful）．
要求：
1．文中不得出現(xiàn)考生真實的姓名、地點和所在學(xué)校的名稱；
2．詞數(shù)不少于70個，短文題目和開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
3．短文應(yīng)包含以上所有要點，還可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
My summer vacation
The summer vacation is coming．What are you going to do this vacation？I'm going to Hainan with my parents this summer．I will visit some places of great interest．I am looking forward to meeting the beautiful sea beaches．
Also，I want to watch TV or listen to music that I like in my spear time．I really want to relax
myself．Of course，I will read some books that I want to read．I will also help my parents to do housework．
Besides，I want to take part in a meaningful activity．I want to go to the countryside to visit the left-behind children．I hope I can help them with their homework．a(chǎn)nd I also hope I can bring them happiness．
I think my holiday will be colorful．I hope I can have a happy vacation．What about you？What are you going to do this summer？．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"My summer vacation"為題分享你的假期計劃．時態(tài)主要為一般將來時及一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1外出旅行，和父母去海南（Hainan）旅游；
2平時生活，看電視、聽音樂，看書、做些家務(wù)
3參加活動，參加一些有意義的活動，比如和同學(xué)去養(yǎng)老院看望老人，去農(nóng)村看望留守兒童
4對自己假期的評價，你的假期將是豐富多彩的
常用到的重點短語：
be going to 打算…
look forward to 期待
help sb to do sth 幫助某人做某事
take part in 參加
【高分句型】
1．I am looking forward to meeting the beautiful sea beaches．
look forward to doing sth 期待做某事
2．Also，I ①want to watch TV or listen to music②that I like in my spear time．
①want to do sth 想要做某事
②that作為關(guān)系詞的定語從句，that作為從句的賓語．修飾先行詞music．
3．①Of course，I will read some books ②that I want to read
①Of course當(dāng)然，做插入語．
②that作為關(guān)系詞的定語從句，that作為從句的賓語．修飾先行詞books．

解答 My summer vacation
The summer vacation is coming．What are you going to do this vacation？I'm going to Hainan with my parents this summer．I will visit some places of great interest．I am looking forward to meeting the beautiful sea beaches．【高分句型】（外出旅行）
Also，I want to watch TV or listen to music that I like in my spear time．【高分句型】I really want to relax myself．Of course，I will read some books that I want to read．【高分句型】I will also help my parents to do housework．（平時生活）
Besides，I want to take part in a meaningful activity．I want to go to the countryside to visit the left-behind children．I hope I can help them with their homework．a(chǎn)nd I also hope I can bring them happiness．（參加活動）
I think my holiday will be colorful．I hope I can have a happy vacation．（對自己假期的評價）What about you？What are you going to do this summer？

點評 這是一篇利用提綱的給材料作文．所給的材料主要分以下幾個個方面：外出旅行，平時生活，參加活動，對自己假期的評價．根據(jù)介紹的是將來的假期活動可知主要用一般將來時態(tài)．在寫作中注意句式的變化，連詞的應(yīng)用及上下文的銜接．寫作亮點：這篇短文分四部分描述了自己的假期計劃．第一部分介紹自己將要去哪里旅行，第二部分是自己的日常計劃，第三部分是想?yún)⒓拥挠幸饬x的活動，最后一部分總體評價自己的假期．短文內(nèi)容切題，意思連貫，表達(dá)清楚、完整．用到了Also，Besides，及定語從句I want to watch TV or listen to music that I like in my spear time等這寫使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理．