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19．如今，在我們身邊，父母均在外打工的留守兒童比比皆是．關(guān)注留守兒童（left-behind children），構(gòu)建和諧社會(huì)的重要內(nèi)容．關(guān)注留守兒童，要靠全社會(huì)的共同努力．你認(rèn)為留守童面臨的主要問(wèn)題有那些？為了解決留守兒童的問(wèn)題，請(qǐng)你向當(dāng)?shù)卣�府提建議：提示：1）缺乏父母的關(guān)愛(ài)（be short of love），性格孤僻（lonely），學(xué)習(xí)壓力大、自卑．2）缺乏安全保障，缺乏 家庭關(guān)愛(ài)（families'care），容易犯錯(cuò)誤甚至犯罪（do some thing against the laws）．
建議：1）學(xué)校建立留守兒童 心里咨詢室（Psychological Counseling Room），老師應(yīng)該把愛(ài)播撒到每一個(gè)留守兒童的心田．2）政府利用節(jié)假日建立 留守兒童家長(zhǎng)學(xué)校（ parents'school for these children）． 3）社會(huì)各界開(kāi)展與留守兒童 一幫一結(jié)對(duì)子的活動(dòng)（hand-in-hand activity）．4）父母盡可能回到孩子身邊，給孩子生活上和學(xué)習(xí)上的幫助和關(guān)愛(ài)．
表達(dá)要求：語(yǔ)言流暢、書(shū)寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔、字?jǐn)?shù)不少于80個(gè)．
Dear Mayor：
I'm a middle school student．I'm writing to tell you something around us．Nowadays，there are many-left-behind children whose parents work away from their hometowns．Most of them are from the countryside，you know，they have many problem．They are always lonely and stressed out because they are short of their parents'love．At the same time，they are easy to make mistakes even do some thing against the laws，because they're short of their families'care．
How to solve their problems？In my opinion，school should set up PsychologicalCounselingRoom andthe teacher should put love into every left-behind children's heart． The government can set up a parents school for these children on holidays，you can organize"hand-in-hand"activity to call on more people to help them．You can also raise money to donate to these children．As the song says："If everyone gives their love，the world will be better．"It's very important for us to pay more attention to these children if we want to build a harmonious society． Above all，the parentsare supposed togo back to be with their children to give help and care to them as possible as they can．Best wishes to you!．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是談?wù)劻羰赝�面臨的主要問(wèn)題并向當(dāng)?shù)卣�府提建議．注意信件的格式．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
一、主要問(wèn)題1．缺乏父母的關(guān)愛(ài)，性格孤僻，學(xué)習(xí)壓力大、自卑． 
               2．缺乏安全保障（缺乏家庭關(guān)愛(ài)，容易犯錯(cuò)誤甚至犯罪）． 
二、建議：1．學(xué)校建立留守兒童心理咨詢室，老師應(yīng)該把愛(ài)播撒到每一個(gè)留守兒童的心田． 
                2．政府利用節(jié)假日建立留守兒童家長(zhǎng)學(xué)校． 
                3．社會(huì)各界開(kāi)展與留守兒童一幫一的結(jié)對(duì)活動(dòng)．
                4．父母盡可能回到孩子身邊，給孩子生活上和學(xué)習(xí)上的幫助和關(guān)愛(ài)．
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
stress out 壓力大
be short of 缺乏
make mistakes 犯錯(cuò)誤
set up 建立
pay attention to 關(guān)注
above all最重要的
as possible as sb can盡可能地
【高分句型】
1．Nowadays，①there are many-left-behind children ②whose parents work③away from their hometowns．
①there be句型，表示存在
②whose是關(guān)系詞，作為定語(yǔ)從句的定語(yǔ)，修飾先行詞children．
③away from 遠(yuǎn)離
2．①It's very important for us to②pay more attention to these children ③if we want to build a harmonious society．
①it is+adj+for sb+to do sth對(duì)某人來(lái)說(shuō)做某事是怎么樣的，it是形式主語(yǔ)，動(dòng)詞不定式做真正主語(yǔ)．
②pay attention to 關(guān)注
③if 引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Dear Mayor，
I'm a middle school student．I'm writing to tell you something around us． Nowadays，there are many-left-behind children whose parents work away from their hometowns．【高分句型】Most of them are from the countryside，you know，they have many problem．They are always lonely and stressed out because they are short of their parents'love．（缺乏父母的關(guān)愛(ài)，性格孤僻，學(xué)習(xí)壓力大、自卑）At the same time，they are easy to make mistakes even do some thing against the laws，because they're short of their families'care．（缺乏安全保障）
How to solve their problems？In my opinion，schools should set up Psychological Counseling Room and the teachers  should put love into every left-behind children's heart．  （學(xué)校建立留守兒童心理咨詢室，老師應(yīng)該把愛(ài)播撒到每一個(gè)留守兒童的心田．）The government can set up a parents school for these children on holidays，you can organize"hand-in-hand"activity to call on more people to help them．You can also raise money to donate to these children．As the song says："If everyone gives their love，the world will be better．"It's very important for us to pay more attention to these children if we want to build a harmonious society．（政府利用節(jié)假日建立留守兒童家長(zhǎng)學(xué)校，社會(huì)各界開(kāi)展與留守兒童一幫一的結(jié)對(duì)活動(dòng)）【高分句型】Above all，the parents are supposed to go back to be with their children to give help and care to them as possible as they can．（父母盡可能回到孩子身邊，給孩子生活上和學(xué)習(xí)上的幫助和關(guān)愛(ài)）
Best wishes to you!

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上．語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣．適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．