Question

隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展，人們消費(fèi)觀(guān)念的轉(zhuǎn)變，購(gòu)物方式也在悄然地發(fā)生變化。“網(wǎng)絡(luò)購(gòu)物”成為一種時(shí)尚，越來(lái)越多的學(xué)生也開(kāi)始加入網(wǎng)購(gòu)群體中。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容，寫(xiě)一篇關(guān)于網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的文章。

一，內(nèi)容提示：

優(yōu)點(diǎn)：1. 足不出戶(hù)，節(jié)約時(shí)間，不會(huì)擁擠勞累

      2. 價(jià)格通常比較便宜

      3. 可供選擇的范圍廣，品種多

缺點(diǎn)：1. 只看到圖片，看不到商品本身

      2. 容易購(gòu)買(mǎi)大量不需要的東西，造成浪費(fèi)

二，要求：

1. 所表述內(nèi)容必須包含提示中所有方面。

2. 詞數(shù)：80詞左右，開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和所在學(xué)校的名稱(chēng)。

三，提示詞匯：網(wǎng)購(gòu) shopping online;  商品 goods

With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping online.

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

With the development of the Internet, many people are used to shopping on line. It has become a fashion in our daily life. Some of us students also join the group.

Shopping on line has many advantages. Just by a click of the mouse, you can buy what you’re interested in without going outdoors. You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowded people and cars and save time. When shopping on line, you can choose from more varieties of goods, whose prices are generally lower.

Every coin has two sides. Its disadvantages are obvious, too. On one hand, it’s very easy for you to buy goods different from the pictures you see on the Internet. On the other hand, shopping on line may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed. That’s a waste of money.

All in all, I love shopping on line.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文要求按照所給的題目結(jié)合提示內(nèi)容完成這篇關(guān)于網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的文章。寫(xiě)作中要包含網(wǎng)購(gòu)的優(yōu)缺點(diǎn)、方面進(jìn)行陳述，表達(dá)出人們的觀(guān)點(diǎn)等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)主要是第三人稱(chēng)，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中注意上下文的過(guò)度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文詳細(xì)、全面地闡明了自己對(duì)網(wǎng)絡(luò)購(gòu)物的看法，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語(yǔ)、狀語(yǔ)從句中的省略，包含賓語(yǔ)從句和定語(yǔ)從句的準(zhǔn)確使用為文章增色不少.如become a fashion in our daily life，On one hand,，On the other hand,，When shopping on line，buy what you’re interested in，whose prices are generally lower.第三段中諺語(yǔ)的恰當(dāng)使用也是可圈可點(diǎn)的，如Every coin has two sides.學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。