Question

臨近期末，學(xué)校在學(xué)習(xí)小組內(nèi)開(kāi)展了年終自評(píng)和組評(píng)活動(dòng)，假設(shè)你是Moonlight小組的組長(zhǎng)，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面表格中的信息和提示，為你的組員Tommy進(jìn)行綜合素質(zhì)的評(píng)價(jià)，寫(xiě)一份素質(zhì)報(bào)告。

Name	Tommy (一個(gè)十五歲的初三學(xué)生)
Characteristics	聰明、勤奮、大方、樂(lè)于助人
Hobbies	不僅喜歡看喜歡偵探小說(shuō)而且喜歡看關(guān)于體育新聞的電視節(jié)目。
Study	自從本學(xué)期他把絕大部分精力投放到學(xué)習(xí)中，他取得了很大進(jìn)步。
Ability	擅長(zhǎng)于跑步，在今年校運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)賽跑比賽中居第一名。
Honour	他成功地幫助Detective Lu解決了綁架的案子。今年，學(xué)校授予了他見(jiàn)義勇為獎(jiǎng)（Award for Bravery）
Problems	面臨考試，遭受壓力痛苦，他沒(méi)有充足的睡眠。
Your suggestions	…

要求：1、表達(dá)清楚、語(yǔ)法正確、上下文連貫；
2、要點(diǎn)必須包括所有相關(guān)信息，并作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)班級(jí)、姓名等；
3、詞數(shù)：100詞左右。
Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight.______________________________
                                                                      
                                                                      
                                                                      
                                                                      

Answer 1

Tommy is a member of my team called Moonlight. He is a Junior three student and he is 15 years old. He is a clever, diligent and generous boy. He is always ready to help others. He not only likes reading detective novels but also likes watching programs about sports news. He has put his effort into study since this term and makes great progress. He is good at running. He won the first place in our school sports meeting this year. He succeeded in helping Detective Lu. He was rewarded by our school this year. Recently, he is going to attend an exam. So he is under great pressure and can’t sleep well. So I think he should relax himself by listening some light music. I think that will have some help.

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們按照表格里的內(nèi)容介紹一下Tommy的情況，為T(mén)ommy寫(xiě)一篇綜合素質(zhì)的評(píng)價(jià)報(bào)告。在表格中有非常詳細(xì)的關(guān)于Tommy各方面的內(nèi)容，我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容有條理的表達(dá)出來(lái)。表格中涉及的內(nèi)容較多，寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意表達(dá)的條理性。這篇作文應(yīng)主要使用第三人稱(chēng)來(lái)寫(xiě)。在最后要給Tommy提一些建議，這一部分應(yīng)該用第一人稱(chēng)。同時(shí)注意表達(dá)的準(zhǔn)確性，尤其是表格中的第五項(xiàng)和第六項(xiàng)內(nèi)容。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的范文。這篇作文內(nèi)容完整，包含了表格中的所有內(nèi)容，沒(méi)有遺漏要點(diǎn)。表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，注意了被動(dòng)形式的使用，如He was rewarded by our school this year.。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意了條理性，使文章具有層次感，條理清楚。短文注意到了長(zhǎng)短句的結(jié)合，并恰當(dāng)?shù)氖褂昧艘恍┻B詞，使文章表達(dá)的連貫。如He is always ready to help others.、He not only likes reading detective novels but also likes watching programs about sports news.、He is good at running. He won the first place in our school sports meeting this year.等。