Question

你覺得校園生活安全嗎？請(qǐng)你寫一篇題為How to Keep Safe in School 的短文，談?wù)勀愕目捶�。�?5分）

內(nèi)容包括：

描述一件發(fā)生在你身上或你看到的發(fā)生在校園的意外事件（經(jīng)過(guò)與結(jié)果）。

提出解決這種校園意外事件的建議（至少兩條）。

呼吁每個(gè)學(xué)生要注意校園安全。

作文要求：

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語(yǔ)句連貫，詞數(shù)80左右。作文的開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

How to Keep Safe in School

Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough?

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

How to keep safe in school

Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough? For example, one day, two students ran after each other in the hallway. Suddenly, one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor. Therefore, he had to stay in hospital for two weeks.

So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways. And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running.

At last, I hope all the students should pay more attention to their safety in school.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì)，我們要做的就是用正確的英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文要用到一般過(guò)去時(shí)，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。提建議可以使用情態(tài)動(dòng)詞should等。寫作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文觀點(diǎn)分明，論證了學(xué)校安全的必要性。短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少.如: because of因?yàn)�，由于；pay attention to注意；And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running. 和老師最好課后留意學(xué)生，阻止他們跑。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理.

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。