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10．為了進(jìn)一步增強(qiáng)中學(xué)生的安全意識(shí)，提高自我保護(hù)能力，學(xué)校將開(kāi)展以"安全"為主題的英語(yǔ)演講比賽．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示和要
求寫(xiě)一篇演講稿．

慎重交友	make friends，be careful，especially on line，…
遇險(xiǎn)報(bào)警	be in danger，keep calm，call the police for help，…
安全飲食	buy and eat food carefully，read instructions and dates，go bad，…
遵守交通規(guī)則	obey the traffic rules，keep to the right in the street，…
…	…

要求：1）內(nèi)容必須包括所給的全部要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2）表達(dá)清楚，語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范；
3）詞數(shù)80左右．文章開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
How to Keep Safe
As teenagers we should always keep safety in mind．But how can we keep safe？Here are some of my suggestions．
First，we should be careful when we make friends，especially on line．Second，if we are in danger，we must keep calm and call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe．Third，we'd better buy and eat food carefully．If the food is in bags，we should read instructions and dates before eating it．Eating food that goes bad will do harm to our health．Fourth，we must obey the traffic rules when we go out．Don't cross the street when the traffic lights are red．Keep to the right in the street．Besides，summer is coming and we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river．
In a word，safety must come first!．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是寫(xiě)一篇有關(guān)怎樣保證安全的演講稿．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．慎重交友 尤其是網(wǎng)上交友
2．遇險(xiǎn)報(bào)警 處于危難，保持冷靜，報(bào)警求助
3．安全飲食 買(mǎi)或者吃食物要仔細(xì)，看日期，是否變質(zhì)，…
4．遵守交通規(guī)則 遵守交規(guī)，走路的右邊
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
make friends交朋友
keep calm保持冷靜
had better do sth 最好做某事
go bad 變質(zhì)
do harm to 對(duì)…不利
obey rules 遵守規(guī)則
【高分句型】
1．Second，①if we are in danger，we must②keep calm and call the police for help in time③so that we can keep ourselves safe．
①if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句，主句含有情態(tài)動(dòng)詞must，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．
②keep calm保持冷靜，ask sb for help 喊某人幫忙，in time 及時(shí)．
③so that引導(dǎo)的目的狀語(yǔ)從句
2．Eating food ①that goes bad will ②do harm to our health．
①that作為關(guān)系詞的定語(yǔ)從句，that作為從句的主語(yǔ)，修飾先行詞food．
②do harm to 對(duì)…不利
3．Besides，summer is coming and we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river．
remember后省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句，it是形式主語(yǔ)，動(dòng)詞不定式是真正主語(yǔ)．

解答 How to Keep Safe
   As teenagers，we should always keep safety in mind．But how can we keep safe？Here are some of my suggestions．
   First，we should be careful when we make friends，especially on line．（慎重交友 尤其是網(wǎng)上交友）Second，if we are in danger，we must keep calm and call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe．（遇險(xiǎn)報(bào)警 處于危難，保持冷靜，報(bào)警）【高分句型】Third，we'd better buy and eat food carefully．If the food is in bags，we should read instructions and dates before eating it．Eating food that goes bad will do harm to our health．（安全飲食 仔細(xì)買(mǎi)或者吃食物，看日期，是否變質(zhì)）【高分句型】Fourth，we must obey the traffic rules when we go out．Don't cross the street when the traffic lights are red．Keep to the right in the street．（遵守交通規(guī)則 遵守交規(guī)，走路的右邊）Besides，summer is coming and we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river．（游泳注意安全）【高分句型】
   In a word，safety must come first!

點(diǎn)評(píng) 此為材料作文，要仔細(xì)審題，抓住重點(diǎn)，將所給信息條理清楚的表達(dá)出來(lái)，可使用一些表示順序的詞，使論述更明確，更有層次感．還要注意多使用一些委婉的提建議的句型，盡量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥單調(diào)．要求語(yǔ)句通順，語(yǔ)法，詞匯，時(shí)態(tài)正確，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范