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【題目】據(jù)報(bào)道，在我國(guó)仍有很多山區(qū)的孩子因?yàn)榧彝ヘ毟F而上不起學(xué)。你們班就如何幫助這些孩子上學(xué)進(jìn)行了討論。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)你把你們的建議寫成一封信寄給English Weekly，希望他們能夠呼吁更多的人參與這項(xiàng)活動(dòng)。

內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：

1. 收集舊課本和衣服；

2. 呼吁更多人幫助他們；

3. 你的建議，至少一條。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可追當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開頭結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Editor,

I’m a senior high school student.

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Editor,

I’m a senior high school student. It’s reported that in China many children in mountainous areas still can’t go to school as a consequence of poverty. Last week, our class held a discussion about how to help them to go to school and lead a happy childhood.

Here are our suggestions. To start with, some old textbooks and clothes can be collected and sent to those children so that they can be reused by them. In addition, it’s also of great significance to appeal to more people and social organizations to help and care for those poor children. As far as I’m concerned, we should save some of our pocket money and give it to those children in need. Above all, we should give them respect, never looking down upon them because they are poor.

We’ll really appreciate it if you can, through the English Weekly, increase public awareness of the poor children’s living conditions and call on more people to help them.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】試題本次作文要求根據(jù)在我國(guó)仍有很多山區(qū)的孩子因?yàn)榧彝ヘ毟F而上不起學(xué)。你們班就如何幫助這些孩子上學(xué)進(jìn)行了討論。假如你是李華，請(qǐng)你把你們的建議寫成一封信寄給Teens的編輯，希望他能夠呼吁更多的人參與這項(xiàng)活動(dòng)。要點(diǎn)包括：1. 收集舊課本和衣服；2. 你的建議, 至少兩條；3. 呼吁更多人幫助他們。故既要完成任務(wù)，又要兼顧形式的要求。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：本篇條理清楚，要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。其句式上的變化既使得文章生動(dòng)而流暢，也體現(xiàn)了作者駕馭句式的能力。例如：it做形式主語(yǔ)It’s reported that in China many children in mountainous areas still have no access to school because of poverty. 非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞never looking down upon them. it’s also very important to appeal to和We would appreciate it if you can句型，have no access to，increase public awareness，call on等詞匯及First and foremost, As far as I’m concerned, What’s more, Above all 等連接詞。